HAIKU - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

burrahobbit · 11-13-2002, 08:58 PM

japanese poems
today have gained my fancy
now i share my joy

tolkien's world, nature
these haikus must have them both
because i say so

real haikus, proper
they must have some nature theme
wind blows on cold plain

it shan't be hard, though
middle-earth is full of it
all is in nature

and commentary
dont do it in prose
or ill make you pay

on that very note
my haikus proper commence
right after this one

HELM'S DEEP
here the dead mount high
the forest overtakes all
only wind remains

[ November 13, 2002: Message edited by: burrahobbit ]

***The Barrow-Wight*** · 11-13-2002, 09:03 PM

oh golly gee whiz
poetic license lurks here
drivel becomes gold

burrahobbit · 11-13-2002, 09:06 PM

that's it, bee-dubya
about enough of your crap
negative nancy [img]smilies/mad.gif[/img]

burrahobbit · 11-13-2002, 09:21 PM

burned and desolate
cut up, hacked to pieces, dead
wretched, vomitting

[ November 15, 2002: Message edited by: burrahobbit ]

burrahobbit · 11-13-2002, 09:26 PM

nothing, empty, cold
filled, brimming, evil, hot, cold
highest punishment

11-13-2002, 10:01 PM

Shadows of silver
glistening over the trees
A Mirror of Fate

11-13-2002, 10:03 PM

Leaves rustle in wind
Autum's whispers fill night's air
crisp and golden lands

Melichus · 11-13-2002, 10:08 PM

A fleeting shadow
White rider under the moon
Windswept plains of night

(That was supposed to be about Gandalf and Shadowfax... [img]smilies/rolleyes.gif[/img] erm...

11-13-2002, 10:10 PM

Together with friends
laughter over golden leaves
Mug o' beer in hand

Kalimac · 11-13-2002, 10:10 PM

A golden circle
Binds its owner forever
My own, my precious.

11-13-2002, 10:14 PM

Puretook: Haiku Queen
Queen of Summertime also
and Licker of Knees

11-13-2002, 10:16 PM

Offending dragons
not the smartest thing to do
my body is burned

11-13-2002, 10:24 PM

sounds of war booming
whispers of death and of fate
night filled with bloodshed

Diamond18 · 11-14-2002, 12:03 AM

That Fool of a Took
Gigantic Hill-Troll
The victor is crushed; must smell

Please slay me swiftly
For that was truly awful
Before eyes, life flashes

Bêthberry · 11-14-2002, 06:13 AM

Here's something Tolkien
I meant to give yesterday,
Now, burrahobbit.

Saruman

Prism-words twist and
Refract a many-hued voice:
Dishonouring Truth.

Bethberry

[ November 15, 2002: Message edited by: Bethberry ]

Rimbaud · 11-14-2002, 09:52 AM

Stars
Does she ever see
Stars as bright on black canvas?
My sweet tears - not yet.

Gandalf
"There's one way only -
To find the vile Cracks of Doom
And cast the Ring there!"

Provocation is a Tender Trap
And that sweet laughter
Tinkled through the sun-drench'd woods
And cast him in love.

Autumnal
Come and fall with me
Let Autumnal wist take us
Send us to sadness.

Enjoyable thread
burrahobbit friend
I will soon return.

Rimbaud · 11-14-2002, 09:55 AM

I forgot to say
A game is therein, above -
Which words are for whom?

Answer in the form, please
Of structure and cold control;
A poem, a poem, dear.

Melichus · 11-14-2002, 10:45 AM

A bit of haiku
To sate your poetic lust
"Nightfall in Mirkwood":

Branches sway and creak
Leaves rustle in the shadows
Cold laughter, silence...

Gayahithwen · 11-15-2002, 02:44 AM

I don't think I could
Write poems as good as this
Silently I'll watch

Maybe I shall try
How hard can it be to write
A haiku or two?

Two Trees in the West
Made of gold and silver
The Valar are proud

Telperion dew
Was made into stars above
The elves then woke up

Evisse the Blue · 11-15-2002, 06:01 AM

I am so sorry:
I don't have inspiration;
'Day shall come again'

That was inspired by Gayahithwen's post

[img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]

HerenIstarion · 11-15-2002, 07:38 AM

All of online fans
(or 'ventilateurs en ligne')
Drying up my hair

Eomer of the Rohirrim · 11-15-2002, 08:41 AM

LotR is cool
I like Gandalf
And Legolas

Just kidding...

We come and go
Walking through the green
All the way singing

Bêthberry · 11-17-2002, 09:49 AM

Nightingale keens
at last on a darkling plain.
Evenstar eclipsed.

Frodo's mortal heart
was aroused by rain-drenched song:
River-daughter's laugh.
Yet title intrigues.
What tender trap do you read,
Poet, love or quest?

Leaf fall and lock lost:
Autumnal wist take Gimli
with Galadriel.

The form answering,
an expostulation now:
'Tis less cold control
than measured finesse,
distillation of desire,
intensity wrought.

Bethberry

[ November 17, 2002: Message edited by: Bethberry ]

HerenIstarion · 11-18-2002, 02:56 AM

Provocation is a Tender Trap re:

For Beren was alone
Save lobs all else forgone
Any maid would trap him

[img]smilies/tongue.gif[/img]

Dúnethalath Taurendor · 11-18-2002, 04:16 AM

No time left,
to gaze at lothlorién trees,
for dark has fallen

Neferchoirwen · 11-18-2002, 06:06 AM

Black shapes on green grass
Legolas walks and gathers
Harvest of arrows

Rimbaud · 11-18-2002, 12:18 PM

Would words have their wings
If truly they were own'd by
Any one of us?

Bethberry, my praise
Thou art correct in thy thought
Panegyrics commence!

Would that all flowers
Grew as endless as sunlight;
I find them fleeting.

Love of the poetic -
Quest for the solitude that
Bears the Ring of truth.

[ November 18, 2002: Message edited by: Rimbaud ]

Persephine · 11-22-2002, 05:30 AM

Hello, I'm new here !!!
Please be nice and welcome me,
I'd be real grateful !!!

[img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]

LePetitChoux · 11-22-2002, 09:47 AM

We welcome you, Seph
To the downs of the Barrow
rest in peace, o wight!

I'm simply no good
at haikus and limericks,
all that sort of thing

[img]smilies/frown.gif[/img]

burrahobbit · 11-22-2002, 02:22 PM

Hi there new person!
Your lovely haiku wows me
for sure, you can stay

one thing you should know
your avatar does not show
you messed up a bit

you need a web host
some place to put the picture
so others can see

i'm sure it's great, though
and i can't help find a host
maybe someone else

Bêthberry · 11-23-2002, 03:31 PM

Congratulations
on your personal title,
Perilous Poet.

So you would wish to
preserve imperishable
the fleeting flower?

Yet you grant words wings.
Sounds silmarillish to me,
confus'd signified

and signifier.
Respect Goldberry's wash day:
Ringbearer's lesson.

Although perhaps your
point is indeed that, but with
hint of Balrog's wings?

Bethberry

Susan Delgado · 11-23-2002, 03:54 PM

This is wonderful
One whole thread to be spoken
In lyrical form

I missed it before
It excersizes my brain
I enjoy it now

Master Rimbaud Sir
And the Lady Bethberry
Your talents wow me

Eye in the Mirror
He looks and sees his future
Sadness carries him

piosenniel · 11-23-2002, 04:08 PM

For Bb:

Seven stars,
a dark night sky -
Cold flames the burning briar

Tears, too,
spilled on the ragged page,
Inked thoughts run

[ November 23, 2002: Message edited by: piosenniel ]

piosenniel · 11-23-2002, 08:18 PM

Butterfly alight
on night's cold petal -
Ah! Wilwarin

Susan Delgado · 11-24-2002, 04:01 AM

oh, look at her now
the unicorn is searching
wait, that's not tolkien

always searching now
precious, where is the precious?
bagginses has it

little hairy feet
never wearing any shoes
they must be dirty

hobbits love to eat
it's always six meals a day
no wonder they're round

galloping the plains
feeling the wind in their hair
Riders of Rohan

with a hoom and hem
trees walking through the forest
fangorn is their home

he ran out the door
with nary a handkerchief
scatterbrained hobbit

they lost their treasure
still there under the mountain
the dragon has it

he guards his treasure
hiding under erebor
but still causes fear

song of the ainu
they helped create the world
eru's still the one

maybe they'll cook us
or squash us into jelly
oh look, there's the sun

[ November 24, 2002: Message edited by: Susan Delgado ]

burrahobbit · 11-24-2002, 06:29 PM

no prose in this one
nor even a limerick
don't do that again.

I know that you're new
but that makes no difference
please stay on topic

don't mean to be rude
but limericks don't belong
your post's deleted

piosenniel · 11-25-2002, 12:56 AM

Pleiades

High in the East they swing -
Remmirath,
the Netted Stars

the phantom · 11-25-2002, 06:53 PM

(I'm doing mine the way they taught me at my school with the pattern being 5-7-5,7-7,5-7-5)

Sauron forged a ring
Twas the ring to rule them all
Isildur took it

It fell into Anduin
Smeagol stole, then Bilbo found

It passed to Frodo
But Gandalf found its secret
The rest- history

HerenIstarion · 11-26-2002, 02:08 AM

Here among the willows
Wind is blowing softly
But the Sea reigns in my heart...

HerenIstarion · 11-26-2002, 02:20 AM

Dark under the hill
With the bare feet, no hat on
But green hood and Sting

He took the ring of Power
You think no Power guided Him?

...And he crept like mouse
Past Balin’s sharp eyes on guard
There are no chance findings...

11-13-2002, 08:58 PM	#1
burrahobbit Hidden Spirit Join Date: May 2000 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 1,424	HAIKU japanese poems today have gained my fancy now i share my joy tolkien's world, nature these haikus must have them both because i say so real haikus, proper they must have some nature theme wind blows on cold plain it shan't be hard, though middle-earth is full of it all is in nature and commentary dont do it in prose or ill make you pay on that very note my haikus proper commence right after this one HELM'S DEEP here the dead mount high the forest overtakes all only wind remains [ November 13, 2002: Message edited by: burrahobbit ] __________________ What's a burrahobbit got to do with my pocket, anyways?

11-13-2002, 09:03 PM	#2
*The Barrow-Wight* Night In Wight Satin Join Date: May 2000 Posts: 4,043	oh golly gee whiz poetic license lurks here drivel becomes gold __________________ The Barrow-Wight

11-13-2002, 09:06 PM	#3
burrahobbit Hidden Spirit Join Date: May 2000 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 1,424	that's it, bee-dubya about enough of your crap negative nancy [img]smilies/mad.gif[/img] __________________ What's a burrahobbit got to do with my pocket, anyways?

11-13-2002, 09:21 PM	#4
burrahobbit Hidden Spirit Join Date: May 2000 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 1,424	burned and desolate cut up, hacked to pieces, dead wretched, vomitting [ November 15, 2002: Message edited by: burrahobbit ] __________________ What's a burrahobbit got to do with my pocket, anyways?

11-13-2002, 09:26 PM	#5
burrahobbit Hidden Spirit Join Date: May 2000 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 1,424	nothing, empty, cold filled, brimming, evil, hot, cold highest punishment __________________ What's a burrahobbit got to do with my pocket, anyways?

11-13-2002, 10:01 PM	#6
Puretook Guest Posts: n/a	Shadows of silver glistening over the trees A Mirror of Fate

11-13-2002, 10:03 PM	#7
Puretook Guest Posts: n/a	Leaves rustle in wind Autum's whispers fill night's air crisp and golden lands

11-13-2002, 10:08 PM	#8
Melichus Haunting Spirit Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Maryland Posts: 54	A fleeting shadow White rider under the moon Windswept plains of night (That was supposed to be about Gandalf and Shadowfax... [img]smilies/rolleyes.gif[/img] erm... __________________ "The other [theme] had now achieved a unity of its own; but it was loud, and vain, and endlessly repeated; and it had little harmony...and it essayed to drown the other music by the violence of its voice, but it seemed that its most triumphant notes were taken by the other and woven into its own solemn pattern..."

11-13-2002, 10:10 PM	#9
Puretook Guest Posts: n/a	Together with friends laughter over golden leaves Mug o' beer in hand

11-13-2002, 10:10 PM	#10
Kalimac Candle of the Marshes Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Flyover Country Posts: 780	A golden circle Binds its owner forever My own, my precious. __________________ Father, dear Father, if you see fit, We'll send my love to college for one year yet Tie blue ribbons all about his head, To let the ladies know that he's married.

11-13-2002, 10:14 PM	#11
Puretook Guest Posts: n/a	Puretook: Haiku Queen Queen of Summertime also and Licker of Knees

11-13-2002, 10:16 PM	#12
Puretook Guest Posts: n/a	Offending dragons not the smartest thing to do my body is burned

11-13-2002, 10:24 PM	#13
Puretook Guest Posts: n/a	sounds of war booming whispers of death and of fate night filled with bloodshed

11-14-2002, 12:03 AM	#14
Diamond18 Eidolon of a Took Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: my own private fantasy world Posts: 3,460	That Fool of a Took Gigantic Hill-Troll The victor is crushed; must smell Please slay me swiftly For that was truly awful Before eyes, life flashes __________________ All shall be rather fond of me and suffer from mild depression.

11-14-2002, 06:13 AM	#15
Bêthberry Cryptic Aura Join Date: May 2002 Posts: 5,997	Here's something Tolkien I meant to give yesterday, Now, burrahobbit. Saruman Prism-words twist and Refract a many-hued voice: Dishonouring Truth. Bethberry [ November 15, 2002: Message edited by: Bethberry ] __________________ I’ll sing his roots off. I’ll sing a wind up and blow leaf and branch away.

11-14-2002, 09:52 AM	#16
Rimbaud The Perilous Poet Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Heart of the matter Posts: 1,062	Stars Does she ever see Stars as bright on black canvas? My sweet tears - not yet. Gandalf "There's one way only - To find the vile Cracks of Doom And cast the Ring there!" Provocation is a Tender Trap And that sweet laughter Tinkled through the sun-drench'd woods And cast him in love. Autumnal Come and fall with me Let Autumnal wist take us Send us to sadness. Enjoyable thread burrahobbit friend I will soon return. __________________ And all the rest is literature

11-14-2002, 09:55 AM	#17
Rimbaud The Perilous Poet Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Heart of the matter Posts: 1,062	I forgot to say A game is therein, above - Which words are for whom? Answer in the form, please Of structure and cold control; A poem, a poem, dear. __________________ And all the rest is literature

11-14-2002, 10:45 AM	#18
Melichus Haunting Spirit Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Maryland Posts: 54	A bit of haiku To sate your poetic lust "Nightfall in Mirkwood": Branches sway and creak Leaves rustle in the shadows Cold laughter, silence... __________________ "The other [theme] had now achieved a unity of its own; but it was loud, and vain, and endlessly repeated; and it had little harmony...and it essayed to drown the other music by the violence of its voice, but it seemed that its most triumphant notes were taken by the other and woven into its own solemn pattern..."

11-15-2002, 02:44 AM	#19
Gayahithwen Wight Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: The chat-room. Posts: 241	I don't think I could Write poems as good as this Silently I'll watch Maybe I shall try How hard can it be to write A haiku or two? Two Trees in the West Made of gold and silver The Valar are proud Telperion dew Was made into stars above The elves then woke up __________________ Before you criticize someone, walk a mile in his shoes. That way, if he gets angry, he'll be a mile away - and barefoot.

11-15-2002, 06:01 AM	#20
Evisse the Blue Brightness of a Blade Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: wherever I may roam Posts: 2,685	I am so sorry: I don't have inspiration; 'Day shall come again' That was inspired by Gayahithwen's post [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] __________________ And no one was ill, and everyone was pleased, except those who had to mow the grass.

11-15-2002, 07:38 AM	#21
HerenIstarion Deadnight Chanter Join Date: Sep 2000 Posts: 4,244	All of online fans (or 'ventilateurs en ligne') Drying up my hair __________________ Egroeg Ihkhsal - Would you believe in the love at first sight? - Yes I'm certain that it happens all the time!

11-15-2002, 08:41 AM	#22
Eomer of the Rohirrim Auspicious Wraith Join Date: May 2002 Location: The Netherlands Posts: 4,859	LotR is cool I like Gandalf And Legolas Just kidding... We come and go Walking through the green All the way singing __________________ Los Ingobernables de Harlond

11-17-2002, 09:49 AM	#23
Bêthberry Cryptic Aura Join Date: May 2002 Posts: 5,997	Nightingale keens at last on a darkling plain. Evenstar eclipsed. Frodo's mortal heart was aroused by rain-drenched song: River-daughter's laugh. Yet title intrigues. What tender trap do you read, Poet, love or quest? Leaf fall and lock lost: Autumnal wist take Gimli with Galadriel. The form answering, an expostulation now: 'Tis less cold control than measured finesse, distillation of desire, intensity wrought. Bethberry [ November 17, 2002: Message edited by: Bethberry ] __________________ I’ll sing his roots off. I’ll sing a wind up and blow leaf and branch away.

11-18-2002, 02:56 AM	#24
HerenIstarion Deadnight Chanter Join Date: Sep 2000 Posts: 4,244	Provocation is a Tender Trap re: For Beren was alone Save lobs all else forgone Any maid would trap him [img]smilies/tongue.gif[/img] __________________ Egroeg Ihkhsal - Would you believe in the love at first sight? - Yes I'm certain that it happens all the time!

11-18-2002, 04:16 AM	#25
Dúnethalath Taurendor Pile O'Bones Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: Holland Posts: 17	No time left, to gaze at lothlorién trees, for dark has fallen __________________ 'Good Morning'

11-18-2002, 06:06 AM	#26
Neferchoirwen Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: RtR: 483.3 miles, Fords of Bruinen Posts: 512	Black shapes on green grass Legolas walks and gathers Harvest of arrows __________________ On really romantic nights of self, I go salsa dancing with my confusion. ~Speed Levitch http://crevicesofsilence.blogspot.com/

11-18-2002, 12:18 PM	#27
Rimbaud The Perilous Poet Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Heart of the matter Posts: 1,062	Would words have their wings If truly they were own'd by Any one of us? Bethberry, my praise Thou art correct in thy thought Panegyrics commence! Would that all flowers Grew as endless as sunlight; I find them fleeting. Love of the poetic - Quest for the solitude that Bears the Ring of truth. [ November 18, 2002: Message edited by: Rimbaud ] __________________ And all the rest is literature

11-22-2002, 05:30 AM	#28
Persephine Animated Skeleton Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: In the arms of Eru Illuvatar Posts: 44	Hello, I'm new here !!! Please be nice and welcome me, I'd be real grateful !!! [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] __________________ ~~~~ Seph ~~~~ Believe in me. I can make you well. I can make you happy. Believe. Make me happy and love me in your turn. Believe in me.

11-22-2002, 09:47 AM	#29
LePetitChoux Vegetable of Doom Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: London Posts: 720	We welcome you, Seph To the downs of the Barrow rest in peace, o wight! I'm simply no good at haikus and limericks, all that sort of thing [img]smilies/frown.gif[/img] __________________ je suis une bonne odeur

11-22-2002, 02:22 PM	#30
burrahobbit Hidden Spirit Join Date: May 2000 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 1,424	Hi there new person! Your lovely haiku wows me for sure, you can stay one thing you should know your avatar does not show you messed up a bit you need a web host some place to put the picture so others can see i'm sure it's great, though and i can't help find a host maybe someone else __________________ What's a burrahobbit got to do with my pocket, anyways?

11-23-2002, 03:31 PM	#31
Bêthberry Cryptic Aura Join Date: May 2002 Posts: 5,997	Congratulations on your personal title, Perilous Poet. So you would wish to preserve imperishable the fleeting flower? Yet you grant words wings. Sounds silmarillish to me, confus'd signified and signifier. Respect Goldberry's wash day: Ringbearer's lesson. Although perhaps your point is indeed that, but with hint of Balrog's wings? Bethberry __________________ I’ll sing his roots off. I’ll sing a wind up and blow leaf and branch away.

11-23-2002, 03:54 PM	#32
Susan Delgado The Perished Flame Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: behind my eyes Posts: 1,096	This is wonderful One whole thread to be spoken In lyrical form I missed it before It excersizes my brain I enjoy it now Master Rimbaud Sir And the Lady Bethberry Your talents wow me Eye in the Mirror He looks and sees his future Sadness carries him __________________ "Man as a whole, Man pitted against the universe, have we seen him at all 'til we see that he is like a hero in a fairy tale?"

11-23-2002, 04:08 PM	#33
piosenniel Desultory Dwimmerlaik Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat..... Posts: 7,779	For Bb: Seven stars, a dark night sky - Cold flames the burning briar Tears, too, spilled on the ragged page, Inked thoughts run [ November 23, 2002: Message edited by: piosenniel ] __________________ Eldest, that’s what I am . . . I knew the dark under the stars when it was fearless - before the Dark Lord came from Outside.

11-23-2002, 08:18 PM	#34
piosenniel Desultory Dwimmerlaik Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat..... Posts: 7,779	Butterfly alight on night's cold petal - Ah! Wilwarin __________________ Eldest, that’s what I am . . . I knew the dark under the stars when it was fearless - before the Dark Lord came from Outside.

11-24-2002, 04:01 AM	#35
Susan Delgado The Perished Flame Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: behind my eyes Posts: 1,096	oh, look at her now the unicorn is searching wait, that's not tolkien always searching now precious, where is the precious? bagginses has it little hairy feet never wearing any shoes they must be dirty hobbits love to eat it's always six meals a day no wonder they're round galloping the plains feeling the wind in their hair Riders of Rohan with a hoom and hem trees walking through the forest fangorn is their home he ran out the door with nary a handkerchief scatterbrained hobbit they lost their treasure still there under the mountain the dragon has it he guards his treasure hiding under erebor but still causes fear song of the ainu they helped create the world eru's still the one maybe they'll cook us or squash us into jelly oh look, there's the sun [ November 24, 2002: Message edited by: Susan Delgado ] __________________ "Man as a whole, Man pitted against the universe, have we seen him at all 'til we see that he is like a hero in a fairy tale?"