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Elfchick · 06-28-2002, 01:38 PM

This song... I wrote it after I finished Reading ROTK For the first time. Its pretty silly I think, and the punctuation is pretty bad, but Anyways Here It is:

oh what will become of the Mallorn tree
that grows by the flowing stream
oh what will become of the Mallorn tree
now that the elves have gone

Will it wilt and fade away
will it grown and stay
Oh what will become of the Mallorn
tree
now the the elves have gone

And what will become of the great
green valleys
The rivers flowing strong,
Oh what will become of the tallest
mountains
now that the elves have gone.

What will Become of all the people,
in kingdoms great and small
Oh what will become of all the people
now that the elves have gone.

Oh What will become of the Mallorn tree
Now that the elves have gone
who will care for the mighty forests
and the ones newly grown

Oh what will become of the middle earth
When no Elves remain
Will all of its beauty, like a river
drain
Or will what is there still remain

Starbreeze · 06-28-2002, 01:45 PM

*wipes away a tear* Oh wow, thats really good. It so sad, I feel tears coming...wow! Got any more?

Ithaeliel · 06-28-2002, 01:46 PM

That's beautiful, Elfchick!!!! I love it!

Raefindel · 06-28-2002, 01:54 PM

That was really beautiful. You are a talented writer, Elfchick! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

piosenniel · 06-28-2002, 01:58 PM

Very wistful! Have you others?

Anunia · 06-28-2002, 02:02 PM

The song is great!! You should write more of them!!

mystra · 06-28-2002, 02:48 PM

thats really nice!!!!! write some more! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

gollum*elf*pup · 06-28-2002, 03:06 PM

wow, that was amazing, elfchick! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Susan Delgado · 06-28-2002, 05:07 PM

That's wonderful...have you put it to music?

ArwenBaggins · 06-28-2002, 05:17 PM

I love it ElfChick!

Alkanoonion · 06-28-2002, 06:55 PM

Thank you Elfchick.
That was really beautiful. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Laredith · 06-28-2002, 07:08 PM

Oh wow! That was great (a lot better than my stuff, I assure you)! Do you have more? Or is that it? Because, of course, it would be nice if there were some more.

QuickSlash · 06-28-2002, 07:27 PM

Great job on that poem. You should try writing about more books. ^_^ Your work is in demand now, so it wouldn't hurt to try. Good luck with it all.

Elfchick · 06-28-2002, 08:23 PM

lol well I have more stuff, but not about LOTR really, I don't spend much time on Songs or poems. I write stories more. Not fan fic either. But yes I think I have a couple more laying around.

Do you really think its anygood?

Ithaeliel · 06-28-2002, 08:41 PM

To be perfectly honest...

yes. It it so sad. And to be truly sad, it has to be good.

What kind of stories do you write?

NyteSky · 06-28-2002, 09:24 PM

That's beautiful. I'd love to see more of your writings, do you have a website or anything? Goodluck with your writings. (tho you seem not to need it) [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]

NyteSky

NazgulNumber10 · 06-28-2002, 09:34 PM

beutiful. simple and lovely. thats a real tear-gerker, and thats why i love it.
[img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] (see I have a lighter side too)

Shadow of Udûn · 06-29-2002, 04:51 AM

I really like that!
One of the most powerful emotions through LOTR is the sense of sadness at the passing of the elves. I think that song expressed it pretty well. [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img]

Morquesse · 06-29-2002, 11:42 AM

Of course I think it's really good! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] I also think you should do some more, or post any others that you have done.
Keep on writing girl, you've got some talent there.
~M
P.S. Greetings and solutions, Shadow of Udûn! Welcome to the downs! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

[ June 29, 2002: Message edited by: Morquesse ]

Elfchick · 07-02-2002, 12:20 PM

hm... Thank you.

Lets see to answer Ithaeliel's questing. I Write fantasy. Yes thats right. Of course i do mystry and stuff sometimes but mostly fantasy.
right now, I'm working on one about a prince and princess of the kingdom of Shankland (I suck and making up names) And they both run away. The princess goes west towards the dark forest and the kingdome of Legends with a knight and a peasant. The Prince goes East towards waterlands. (another kingdom) Anyways, Right away The prince is shot, he doesn't die but he is badly wounded and he is takin to Waterlands palace to be healed.
Meanwhile the Knight who is travelling with the princess is Killed. [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img]
The Princess and the peasant flee into the dark forest. Get lost. Meet these twelve mysterious guys. They go to this bridge held against the dark forest. (which is always growing and even took over a kingdom) Anyways The bridge is held by the soldiers of shankland and Legends who have a special alliance. anyways, the Legends soldiers attack and burn the bridge. Betrayal! Oh my what a surprize!
Meanwhile the Prince goes to see if he can get the dwarves to join the fight against Trandell (no one knows yet that legends is involved) he and his companions (the prince and princess of the waterlands) meet the king of Trandells sister. She agree's to help them. they continue across the greater barrins to the dwarves land, meet a little goblin dude who helps them. travel into the ring of flame. Meet a girl with 26 wolves who comes from the kingdom overtaken by the dark forest so long ago. She goes with them.
MEANWHIlE the princess is on her way up dragon peaks. (won't release to much about that now) once they get to the top they ride to dragon Island on what? Dragons! oh come on you can't say you didn't know! anyways. The Princess finds out her mother was the queen of these lost people, and she is the heir. but there are evil people from other islands (haven't got that part worked out yet) who ride dragons to and have Allied with Trandell (how Ironic) ANyways, In the end there will be a big fight, People will die, dragons will die. Lots of other scary stuff will happen. Trandell will be taken over by the kings sister. And I'm not giving the rest of the ending away!

Oh and there are these four black horses. THEY RULE.
SO what do you think?

PS. the names of the places can still be changed, and I'd like a little help with thinking up names for places if someone wants to help. Oh and I need a title.

Elfchick · 07-02-2002, 12:24 PM

Oh now you got me started. Here is another poem I wrote. Its not as good as the other. I wrote it when I should have been working on science. ITs not sad like the other just some little thing I scribbled. Its really not to good.

Sword of darkness
Long and light
Forged for stongness
In the night

You can weild it
If you dare
but be warned,
For darkness is there.

Sword of light
Short yet bright
with a true hearted weilder
Will win the fight

If you are weak
It be to
Reflecting your heart
showing it to you

Sheild of night
Shinning bright
With diamonds light
Blocking blows left and right

Easy to use in a fight
Tempting apponents into sight
Blocking blows and killing the right
In you.

Sheild of light
Dull not bright
using your heart
to win the fight

Its hard to bear
For only the true
can weild its light
Using their hearts
Winning the fight

Darkness strong
Fighting for you
until it clashes with the true
then in the blink of an eye
it abandons you.

Which do you use?

Ithaeliel · 07-02-2002, 05:34 PM

Augh! It's so... wonderful! *SOB* It's so sad!

And the story sounds great! U should get it published!

Nimrodel · 07-03-2002, 10:11 AM

It's very sad and Haunting, Elfchick. You did a good job. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Arwen Imladris · 07-03-2002, 09:08 PM

Oh my! Elfchick, these are great! More More! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

gee, I wish I could write like that! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

NyteSky · 07-03-2002, 09:49 PM

[img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] Sounds great! (Fantasy's the best of course, and dragons improve anything) Could I read it sometime? Free editing services. [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] (I have very bad grammer and my spelling's not much better but other than that I'm really good at it!) [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] Names I can do tho. Lots of names. Just ask if you ever need any.
Great second poem too. I think I'd go with the swords, (one in each hand, best way to go) I've never cared much for shields. How far have you gotten in your book? Sounds like you have it well planned out at least, got me beat. Have fun writing!

Calencoire · 07-04-2002, 08:42 PM

Hey, thats really cool.

06-28-2002, 01:38 PM	#1
Elfchick Pile O'Bones Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Middle Earth Posts: 12	I'd like your Opinion on something. This song... I wrote it after I finished Reading ROTK For the first time. Its pretty silly I think, and the punctuation is pretty bad, but Anyways Here It is: oh what will become of the Mallorn tree that grows by the flowing stream oh what will become of the Mallorn tree now that the elves have gone Will it wilt and fade away will it grown and stay Oh what will become of the Mallorn tree now the the elves have gone And what will become of the great green valleys The rivers flowing strong, Oh what will become of the tallest mountains now that the elves have gone. What will Become of all the people, in kingdoms great and small Oh what will become of all the people now that the elves have gone. Oh What will become of the Mallorn tree Now that the elves have gone who will care for the mighty forests and the ones newly grown Oh what will become of the middle earth When no Elves remain Will all of its beauty, like a river drain Or will what is there still remain __________________ Elfchick Welcome to the Barrows Land of the dead If you think being dead is boring Get a Life!

06-28-2002, 01:45 PM	#2
Starbreeze Ghost of a Smile Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Mirkwood - Middle Earth Posts: 389	wipes away a tear Oh wow, thats really good. It so sad, I feel tears coming...wow! Got any more? __________________ Do not tamper with the affairs of wizards, they are not all that subtle - Terry Pratchett To write is to make dreams, to make dreams is to awaken the fantasy of the mind, to awaken the mind is to be a master.

06-28-2002, 01:46 PM	#3
Ithaeliel Cornus Caliga Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Five-hundred-twenty-five thousand, six hundred minutes from here Posts: 710	That's beautiful, Elfchick!!!! I love it! __________________ That best portion of a good man's life, His little, nameless, unremembered acts of kindness and of love. .................William Wordsworth

06-28-2002, 01:54 PM	#4
Raefindel Sword of the Spirit Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Washington State Posts: 1,313	That was really beautiful. You are a talented writer, Elfchick! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ Blessed be the Lord my Strength, Who trained my hands for war and my fingers to fight. Psallm 144:1

06-28-2002, 01:58 PM	#5
piosenniel Desultory Dwimmerlaik Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat..... Posts: 7,779	Very wistful! Have you others? __________________ Eldest, that’s what I am . . . I knew the dark under the stars when it was fearless - before the Dark Lord came from Outside.

06-28-2002, 02:02 PM	#6
Anunia Haunting Spirit Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Rivendell Posts: 60	The song is great!! You should write more of them!! __________________ Flowers are the alphabet of angels, whereby they write on the hills and fields mysterious truths. Dream the impossible, because dreams do come true.

06-28-2002, 02:48 PM	#7
mystra Haunting Spirit Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: cyber raga. nuff said. Posts: 88	thats really nice!!!!! write some more! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] __________________ "We each must choose our own path. mine had further to go." Cyber Raga. Nuff said.

06-28-2002, 03:06 PM	#8
gollumelfpup Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: big...scary...castle... Posts: 277	wow, that was amazing, elfchick! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] __________________ ~elfpup~ PI's evil family dog!!! I have found the chicken who is not a chicken!

06-28-2002, 05:07 PM	#9
Susan Delgado The Perished Flame Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: behind my eyes Posts: 1,096	That's wonderful...have you put it to music? __________________ "Man as a whole, Man pitted against the universe, have we seen him at all 'til we see that he is like a hero in a fairy tale?"

06-28-2002, 05:17 PM	#10
ArwenBaggins Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: I don't know... will there be a quiz on this later? Posts: 486	I love it ElfChick! __________________ .:Chelsy:. Reality is a nice place to visit, but I wouldn't want to live there. Terennth Kingdoms

06-28-2002, 06:55 PM	#11
Alkanoonion Spirit in Eriador Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Adelaide Posts: 392	Thank you Elfchick. That was really beautiful. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ In prosperity our friends know us; in adversity we know our friends.

06-28-2002, 07:08 PM	#12
Laredith Pile O'Bones Join Date: May 2002 Location: Gondor...no, seriously, I really do live there! Posts: 11	Oh wow! That was great (a lot better than my stuff, I assure you)! Do you have more? Or is that it? Because, of course, it would be nice if there were some more. __________________ FRODO LIVES!!! AND SO DOES SAM!!! AND SO DOES GANDALF!!! AND SO DOES... you think that's enough?

06-28-2002, 07:27 PM	#13
QuickSlash Wight Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Not here. Posts: 121	Great job on that poem. You should try writing about more books. ^_^ Your work is in demand now, so it wouldn't hurt to try. Good luck with it all. __________________ We're here and now, but will we ever be again? / 'Cause I have found / All that shimmers in this world is sure to fade, away, again. -Shimmer, Fuel

06-28-2002, 08:23 PM	#14
Elfchick Pile O'Bones Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Middle Earth Posts: 12	lol well I have more stuff, but not about LOTR really, I don't spend much time on Songs or poems. I write stories more. Not fan fic either. But yes I think I have a couple more laying around. Do you really think its anygood? __________________ Elfchick Welcome to the Barrows Land of the dead If you think being dead is boring Get a Life!

06-28-2002, 08:41 PM	#15
Ithaeliel Cornus Caliga Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Five-hundred-twenty-five thousand, six hundred minutes from here Posts: 710	To be perfectly honest... yes. It it so sad. And to be truly sad, it has to be good. What kind of stories do you write? __________________ That best portion of a good man's life, His little, nameless, unremembered acts of kindness and of love. .................William Wordsworth

06-28-2002, 09:24 PM	#16
NyteSky Haunting Spirit Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Tower of Sorcery and Lore Posts: 76	That's beautiful. I'd love to see more of your writings, do you have a website or anything? Goodluck with your writings. (tho you seem not to need it) [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] NyteSky __________________ The cure for boredom is curiosity. There is no cure for curiosity. AIM: NightSky717 Email/msn IM: davidone_2000@msn.com

06-28-2002, 09:34 PM	#17
NazgulNumber10 Wight Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: The Lonely Mountain Posts: 116	beutiful. simple and lovely. thats a real tear-gerker, and thats why i love it. [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] (see I have a lighter side too) __________________ http://squee.netdrain.com/images/hnb/hnb10.jpg

06-29-2002, 04:51 AM	#18
Shadow of Udûn Animated Skeleton Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Sydney Posts: 32	I really like that! One of the most powerful emotions through LOTR is the sense of sadness at the passing of the elves. I think that song expressed it pretty well. [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img] __________________ What it was could not be seen: it was like a great shadow...

06-29-2002, 11:42 AM	#19
Morquesse Wight Join Date: May 2002 Location: Past the fields we know.... Posts: 202	Of course I think it's really good! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] I also think you should do some more, or post any others that you have done. Keep on writing girl, you've got some talent there. ~M P.S. Greetings and solutions, Shadow of Udûn! Welcome to the downs! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] [ June 29, 2002: Message edited by: Morquesse ] __________________ I'm not ashamed to let you know I want this light in me to show. I'm not ashamed to speak the name of Jesus Christ.~Newsboys

07-02-2002, 12:20 PM	#20
Elfchick Pile O'Bones Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Middle Earth Posts: 12	hm... Thank you. Lets see to answer Ithaeliel's questing. I Write fantasy. Yes thats right. Of course i do mystry and stuff sometimes but mostly fantasy. right now, I'm working on one about a prince and princess of the kingdom of Shankland (I suck and making up names) And they both run away. The princess goes west towards the dark forest and the kingdome of Legends with a knight and a peasant. The Prince goes East towards waterlands. (another kingdom) Anyways, Right away The prince is shot, he doesn't die but he is badly wounded and he is takin to Waterlands palace to be healed. Meanwhile the Knight who is travelling with the princess is Killed. [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img] The Princess and the peasant flee into the dark forest. Get lost. Meet these twelve mysterious guys. They go to this bridge held against the dark forest. (which is always growing and even took over a kingdom) Anyways The bridge is held by the soldiers of shankland and Legends who have a special alliance. anyways, the Legends soldiers attack and burn the bridge. Betrayal! Oh my what a surprize! Meanwhile the Prince goes to see if he can get the dwarves to join the fight against Trandell (no one knows yet that legends is involved) he and his companions (the prince and princess of the waterlands) meet the king of Trandells sister. She agree's to help them. they continue across the greater barrins to the dwarves land, meet a little goblin dude who helps them. travel into the ring of flame. Meet a girl with 26 wolves who comes from the kingdom overtaken by the dark forest so long ago. She goes with them. MEANWHIlE the princess is on her way up dragon peaks. (won't release to much about that now) once they get to the top they ride to dragon Island on what? Dragons! oh come on you can't say you didn't know! anyways. The Princess finds out her mother was the queen of these lost people, and she is the heir. but there are evil people from other islands (haven't got that part worked out yet) who ride dragons to and have Allied with Trandell (how Ironic) ANyways, In the end there will be a big fight, People will die, dragons will die. Lots of other scary stuff will happen. Trandell will be taken over by the kings sister. And I'm not giving the rest of the ending away! Oh and there are these four black horses. THEY RULE. SO what do you think? PS. the names of the places can still be changed, and I'd like a little help with thinking up names for places if someone wants to help. Oh and I need a title. __________________ Elfchick Welcome to the Barrows Land of the dead If you think being dead is boring Get a Life!

07-02-2002, 12:24 PM	#21
Elfchick Pile O'Bones Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Middle Earth Posts: 12	Oh now you got me started. Here is another poem I wrote. Its not as good as the other. I wrote it when I should have been working on science. ITs not sad like the other just some little thing I scribbled. Its really not to good. Sword of darkness Long and light Forged for stongness In the night You can weild it If you dare but be warned, For darkness is there. Sword of light Short yet bright with a true hearted weilder Will win the fight If you are weak It be to Reflecting your heart showing it to you Sheild of night Shinning bright With diamonds light Blocking blows left and right Easy to use in a fight Tempting apponents into sight Blocking blows and killing the right In you. Sheild of light Dull not bright using your heart to win the fight Its hard to bear For only the true can weild its light Using their hearts Winning the fight Darkness strong Fighting for you until it clashes with the true then in the blink of an eye it abandons you. Which do you use? __________________ Elfchick Welcome to the Barrows Land of the dead If you think being dead is boring Get a Life!

07-02-2002, 05:34 PM	#22
Ithaeliel Cornus Caliga Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Five-hundred-twenty-five thousand, six hundred minutes from here Posts: 710	Augh! It's so... wonderful! SOB It's so sad! And the story sounds great! U should get it published! __________________ That best portion of a good man's life, His little, nameless, unremembered acts of kindness and of love. .................William Wordsworth

07-03-2002, 10:11 AM	#23
Nimrodel Haunting Spirit Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: The Golden Wood Posts: 48	It's very sad and Haunting, Elfchick. You did a good job. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ Beside the falls of Nimrodel,By water clear and cool, Her voice as falling silver fell Into the shining pool

07-03-2002, 09:08 PM	#24
Arwen Imladris Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: In a box with a fox Posts: 1,347	Oh my! Elfchick, these are great! More More! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] gee, I wish I could write like that! [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] __________________ "Wake up! Wake up! Wake up, sleepies, we must go, yes, we must go at once."

07-03-2002, 09:49 PM	#25
NyteSky Haunting Spirit Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Tower of Sorcery and Lore Posts: 76	[img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] Sounds great! (Fantasy's the best of course, and dragons improve anything) Could I read it sometime? Free editing services. [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] (I have very bad grammer and my spelling's not much better but other than that I'm really good at it!) [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] Names I can do tho. Lots of names. Just ask if you ever need any. Great second poem too. I think I'd go with the swords, (one in each hand, best way to go) I've never cared much for shields. How far have you gotten in your book? Sounds like you have it well planned out at least, got me beat. Have fun writing! __________________ The cure for boredom is curiosity. There is no cure for curiosity. AIM: NightSky717 Email/msn IM: davidone_2000@msn.com

07-04-2002, 08:42 PM	#26
Calencoire Haunting Spirit Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Rivendell Posts: 89	Hey, thats really cool. __________________ Where there is life, there is hope