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02-27-2006, 02:49 PM | #241 |
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Whoa! Well, there's a problem here for me - I'm not writing for any readers other than ourselves. I'm just enjoying developing 'Meghan' and interacting with each of your characters as I think SHE might do - and without regard to how anyone else might interpret her thoughts, words, or actions.
I'm just playing a game here . . . If the reader likes it, likes my character fine -- but perhaps they might see her as a complete twit. And I don't really care. From my point of view, I've written well, she's interacted with others as I feel she ought to, and that's all that matters to me in an RPG
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02-27-2006, 02:53 PM | #242 |
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Well, I'm not writing a novel, but I do mean to do something that will be enjoyable for whoever happens to stumble upon it! And I don't worry about the reader not liking Osmod, I worry about the reading getting the wrong idea about him! Basically, I don't want to RP a whiny, moody guy... yet I want my character to be consistant as well, for the reader's sake. Yet enough of that, at least from my part... if anyone wants to talk about it, feel free to start sending out PM's!! Let's get back to writing a game.
Edit: I'd also like to remind/inform those I have not told before, that I'm basically here to learn how to write good stories in English. I was a bit of a writer back in Argentina but now I find that my Spanish is not as good as it used to be and my English is getting better... given that odds are I will stay in North America, I rather learn to write in English than to remember how to do it in Spanish. That's perhaps why I am more concerned about overall quality of the RPG (at least my part on it, the rest of you can do as you please).
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02-27-2006, 03:08 PM | #243 |
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Fellow Bregowarians!
As I'm going to sleep soon, and won't be with you before 6-7 PM (GMT), I'll just suggest a few things. Farael: Write Osmod's post to address either all (all would hear) or then just Sythric and Raedwald (they are near each other) Undómë: Write Raedwald's answer to Sythric / Osmod / both. Eonwe SW: Write about Eostre's feelings about this all... Maeggaladiel: Feel free to come more involved: you write good posts, keeping up the tension... I'll be able to getr Sythrics comments in less than 24-hours, and if everything is almost settled by then, we should really be getting forwards. I quess Arry is getting frustrated with us... Anyhow: I think we have just started the "real game"! And it's fun! I agree with Undómë about this basic predicament of this being a game and fun in the first place, not so much a serious novel (with my english I would never dream of writing one in english!)
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02-27-2006, 04:27 PM | #244 | |
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But perhaps now things will even out a bit more. I mean, look! I'm online at the same time as THREE Bregowarians! I'm not a lone ghost floating across the plains today.
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02-27-2006, 05:14 PM | #245 | |
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02-27-2006, 05:42 PM | #246 |
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A novel written by Valier
Ok I am sorry if I came off a little rude. I just wanted to let you wulfhamers know that yes Vaenosa has problems, but I have been trying to drop small hints that she actually is beginning to care for the others. The boar was supposed to be a sign of her "affection". She lived alone with her mother for a long time and does not quite know how to interact with others well. I will try to make her more friendly as the days go by, but remember she will always be brash. Her comments towards the men are more humorous then hatred now. I thought I made that clear, but in the future I will try to make it more clear.
I understand it is hard for your characters to "get" Vaenosa by her actions and words, but the reactions I was hoping for would be more of concern for her and not straight out hatred.ie: Hoping that Vaenosa would die. Please read her words for what they are and not what you think she is saying. For a really good example of what I am talking about, take the men cooking. Vaenosa and I would assume Incana have both been raised cooking. The men's gungho attitude towards cooking and the like would seems strange to Vaenosa. Which in turn would affect her opinion of them. I understand this but it is a little strange that the men would get the woman to hunt while the men cook. I added the Boar scene just for the purpose of seeming more friendly, and since I was the only one not injured I thought it plausible that she would try to find more food. I really don't know how to hunt! I have just been trying to fill in time. Vaenosa would rather cook and tend to the horses and such then risk her neck hunting. But someone had to do it. Remember I am a girl in RL I don't really know too much about the hunting and fighting. I thought that since everyone was injured this would be the logical thing to do. Ok well after that rant I will try to vocalize her feelings and intentions more but, not so much that it changes her as a whole.Please feel free men to hunt and not just cook. THE END |
02-27-2006, 10:09 PM | #247 |
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I've pm'd with Naria. She's come up with the idea of her knowing of me from both of our mother's doing business together. I'm allowing her to tell about Vaenosa's past because it makes more sense for her to do it. It would be out of character for Vaenosa to out right tell about it. I hope this opens up the mystery of Vaenosa for all of you, so we can slowly become friends.
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02-27-2006, 11:47 PM | #248 |
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Hi. I'm back. I might not get a post up until tommorow, though... I'm sorry... stretched for time now that I'm back from the weekend... trying to catch up on everything...
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02-28-2006, 10:10 AM | #249 | |
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02-28-2006, 11:14 AM | #250 | |
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And also, I think we should start putting up Saves for Eowyn... so that she does not need to catch up to a whole lot all of a sudden.... it might make life easyer for her if she manages to find a way to add Eostre's part without changing (much) what has already been written
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02-28-2006, 11:28 AM | #251 | |
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02-28-2006, 12:25 PM | #252 |
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Fellow Bregowarians!
I have one idea concerning the ferry, and have PM'd Arry about it. It will all come to, how fast Arry would like to get us to meet the Wulfhamers. If he agrees, I'll write us to the ferry and give us a small nut to crack there... If he disagrees (if we really should haste), I'll inform you about it, and then it's probably up to anyone, to get us over the ferry and onwards. Meanwhile, let's ride and discuss! Farael's idea, concerning people coming to ride with each other, is good. |
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Feel free to invite him over in your next post, or just ignore him and I'll make him butt in.
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02-28-2006, 01:15 PM | #254 | |
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I got green light from Arry. I could be writing us to the ferry, surely (as sure as these things can be...) at least on Friday afternoon (GMT), possibly thursday late evening (about 10 PM, GMT). If this timetable fits everyone?
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02-28-2006, 02:06 PM | #255 |
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Wulfham group I have filled my save.
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02-28-2006, 03:57 PM | #256 | |
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02-28-2006, 07:03 PM | #257 |
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Naria,
Check your pms.
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02-28-2006, 10:05 PM | #258 |
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Nogrod brought up that he did not understand my 'olive branch' comment... is that proper English? I know English is the second language for the two of us and while I was not sure it IS proper English, Nogrod is not sure it is NOT... so it's just as likely that either will be wrong.
Edit: Also, Undome, should any of us notice that you have stopped?
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Naria -
Hmm..... I've been thinking a lot about your recent post. My apologies for my earlier goof. I really liked your post, but I think there may be a small problem. It wouldn't take much to fix it, though. Here is my idea. You can tell me to jump in the lake if you think this won't work! You ask Dorran a question about the meat but then don't wait for him to answer. Instead, you go ahead and sit next to Brand for lunch: Quote:
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Would it be alright if we did this? 1. Right after the question about the dry meat to Dorran, you could add just one sentence where you say something like this: Dorran nodded and then walked off to think about the question that Incana had raised. If you add a sentence like that, it makes sense for Dorran to bring this question up with you in a later post, and the scene isn't just left hanging. 2. End your current post before the last paragraph. Stop at the point that says She smiled at the man feeling a weight lift off of her shoulders. If you do that, then Brand will be able to answer you and offer some kind of response about Vaenosa. 3. Save the last little paragraph for a separate post and put it up after Brand finishes his response. You can use this as a way to lead into the post that Dorran will make in response to Incana, the one we talked about by pm. Just to let you know, Dorran has overheard what Incana said and will comment on this as well as answer the two questions: the one you raised about the meat and the one about the turnips. Arry and Naria What do you think of this approach?
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Thanks Naria the post is great! I will begin to be friendlier as we go on, please try idle chit chat with Vaenosa I promise it won't hurt!
Also is there any ideas as to when Arry you maybe had planned to meet up with the others? In *RL* Days. |
02-28-2006, 11:44 PM | #261 |
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Tevildo--I hope the changes that I have made are the right ones. You are right, it does sound better and leaves it open for a response from you and Arry.
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03-01-2006, 12:46 AM | #262 | |
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I'll leave that to the writers on the Bregoware team to answer. The Wulfhamers will be in position whenever is needed.
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03-01-2006, 01:34 AM | #263 | |
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But after we have some minor problems at the ferry (thu-fri, RL), we should be quite ready to meet you - as far as I am concerned... If people post well at the weekend to solve our problems, I guess we could be over the river after it. So next week, the weekend after that at the latest?
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03-01-2006, 01:38 AM | #264 |
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I want to encourage all the gamers to make use of me as the Game Moderator as needed for problems that arise which can't be solved through a civil presentation of a problem and a discussion in like manner for how it can be resolved. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Having said that, I do expect posts to the Discussion Thread for this and any other game in the Shire or Rohan to be civil and conducted in a polite manner between the gamers. As mature members of the Downs, we can all approach each other in a friendly and accomodating manner on this public part of the forum. If there are issues that need to be discussed in a more intense manner they can be taken to PM and hammered out between the persons concerned. If there are problems which absolutely cannot be resolved through polite discussion, then I am to be PM'd for moderation as needed. Any posts to this Discussion Thread which I consider to be uncivil will be sent back to their writers. And they will be asked to think the problem through and approach it in a more friendly/helpful/polite manner. Thanks in advance for your cooperation. ~*~ Piosenniel, Game Moderator |
03-01-2006, 01:51 AM | #265 |
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Thanks for the reminders and suggestions , Pio.
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Farael Your 'offering the olive branch' was an appropriate use of the phrase. Osmod was making a gesture of peace and reconciliation between himself and Sythric - putting aside any bad feeling of being displaced as the Brego 'leader'. I would, however, change the word you used following it - fuzz - to fuss. -- Arry
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03-01-2006, 02:58 AM | #267 | |
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03-01-2006, 03:42 AM | #268 | |
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I've put up a post. Brand is unaware that Dorran has overheard Incana's recounting of Vaenosa's story.
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03-01-2006, 03:17 PM | #269 |
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Nogrod:
This weekend will be quite busy for me, but I should be able to get at least one post up. If you get us to the ferry before Friday Night I might be able to get one on Fri. and one over the weekend. If that's ok, I don't mind the time-table at all Undome, Eowyn and Maeggaladiel (Did I butcher it?) what do you think?
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03-01-2006, 03:22 PM | #270 | |
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I think we should get Maeghan back to the company first, and look at the timetables then. But I'll try to give you some outlines of our approaching the scene quite soon, so then anyone can continue the story forwards. I'd like to take the lead only when we come to the actual ferry. And within my current plan, there could be something to think for everyone before we get to the ferry. Suspense, suspense... EDIT: PS. Arry said, we can take all the time we need. I don't think it means "take a month", and I sure believe, we should be advancing. But let's not be overhasty?
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03-01-2006, 03:59 PM | #271 |
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The plan forwards to Bregowarians
So here’s the first map of the situation, after we (hopefully) get Meghan back to tracks. Feel free to move us, paying heed to these suggestions. There is the town of Earnanaes by the ferry. It kind of striked me a couple of weeks ago, that it would sound quite improbable, there being a ferry in the middle of nowhere anyhow. Now it fits nicely. A town by the ferry. So the history goes: first the traveling route, then the market... You may everyone decide, what’s your characters level of knowledge about towns outside your Bregowarian perimeter. Sythric and Raedwald should have visited it quite some times (not ever so often, but still). So they would be familiar with it. And if I recall it right, it was Eostre, who had been across the river before (or do I mess things up?). If yes, she should have been in the town too. Or anyone being there before... I quess, that as many, or at least some of us, knows about the town, we should plan to eat our lunch there (we talked about being at the ferry at noon, didn’t we?): not using our small carry-along ratios, but to buy warm, wellmade food from a tavern or something. But alas! The town, as we reach it, is already deserted. Empty. Apart from occasional scavengers (wild-dogs etc.), it’s totally devoid of (other) living souls. We should note first some empty farmhouses, as we approach the town. We should take the main alley / road / street – whatever – and ride along it, through this deserted town. You just come up with anything you think your character makes of it. (I was thinking about some posts about riding slowly through the ghost-town...) As everyone is “happy” with the situation, I’ll take us to the ferry to meet our small challenge.
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I didn't ask for your opinion, why did you give it anyway? =P no, ok.. I was adressing you first, so then I meant to add the others as well for the question, not to leave you out. My mistake. About the town, I was thinking along the lines of having a small settlement over there (as yes, having only one guy working the rafts would not make much sense) but I like your idea of having a full-fledged town... that will be deserted. It sounds great actually. Only one thing though... if there is no-one in town, how will we man the rafts? and most importantly... if they all escaped (which is what I assume has happened, unless we find the village torched down) wouldn't the rafts be on the other side of the river?
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03-01-2006, 08:15 PM | #273 |
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Brand will be back into camp well after dinner and nightfall. Would it be possible for you to set up Vaenosa so that he can speak with her - preferably in private? Thanks! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------After that - I'd like to crunch a little time for the Wulfham group and move us further south. -- Arry
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I have an idea for this problem. The raft would be a bit bigger than one we may imagine, more like a small barge? It would be rigged to a pulley system of sorts. Your group reaches the river and one member, maybe two at a time with horses, would ride the raft and pull themselves across. The people waiting back on the other side to cross would use the pulley to get the raft to them for the next person(s) . Think of it as a clothes line, pretty much the same concept. Yes, no? |
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03-02-2006, 12:11 AM | #275 | |
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03-02-2006, 12:43 AM | #276 |
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Thanks Farael!
I like the rickety barge idea of yours. Getting the horses across would prove to be interesting to say the least. |
03-02-2006, 12:53 AM | #277 |
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Horses do swim -- sometimes on these old types of barges, the people rode the barge while the horses were tied at the back of the barge and swam across.
Naria Not too far from where I live we have a pulley ferry-barge much as you described. ~*~ Pio
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03-02-2006, 01:04 AM | #278 |
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Duh, yeah I guess the horses would know how to swim...I'm around them enough lol
Our different groups could still have a horse or two that either weren't up to the swim or got spooked of the idea as they got closer to the river....hmmm |
03-02-2006, 01:18 AM | #279 |
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Excellent idea with the deserted town-- I approve! And an old barge ride would definately add some excitement to the river crossing. I'm not sure how often I'll be online during the weekend, either; although if I am online, it'll be during the late evenings.
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03-02-2006, 03:32 AM | #280 |
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My save is filled. You're now free to do the set-up scene that Arry mentioned for the private meeting between Brand and Vaenosa. And this time, I swear, Dorran will be nowhere in sight to overhear! Indeed, I think he will be off to bed early.
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