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Quentingolmo
Join Date: Aug 2017
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This thread will be slightly different. I am going to start to post the Lammas, whose form I have discussed in the Outline thread. Since the original work by that name is extremely outdated, and we have better more recent equivalents, I have (at the advice of gondowe and my own intuition) used those and compiled them into a collection. Later in Life Tolkien referred to the Lammas many times as an in-universe document by Pengolodh, and the essay 'Quendi and the Eldar' is described as a summary of parts of it. This is the same case as the Osanwe-kenta, as well as the Tengwesta Quenderinwa. Therefore I have given many of these works as 'chapters' under the overall heading of 'The Lammas.' In this thread I will post the intro to the overall work as well as the first 'chapter,' the Dangweth Pengolodh. Thus, this is the first draft of the work Dangweth Pengolodh as well as the introductory material for The Lammas.
Our basis text is that of "The Lammas" given in HoME V, and "Dangweth Pengolodh" given in HoME XII. Wherever the text is different from HoME V/XII, this is marked by an editing mark. The markings are: LH-xx for tracking any changes to the intro text for the Lammas. DP-xx for tracking any changes to the text for the Dan. Pen. Some conventions of my writing: Normal Text is from the basic text that is mentioned above (when I change the basic-Text it will be mentioned) Bold Text = source information, comments and remarks {example} = text that should be deleted [example] = normalised text, normally only used for general changes <source example> = additions with source information ...... = This section of the paragraph is unchanged from the source. Quote:
LH-02: In Quendi and the Eldar we have a footnote saying that Pengolodh wrote the Lammas in Eriador in the Second Age. LH-03: Removed a reference to Aelfwine. Quote:
DP-011: This stems from the note in Quendi and the Eldar that he wrote the Lammas in Eriador, and since we are removed Aelfwine from the transmission, we must include this under the Lammas, as it works well as a kind of preface to the whole work. To do that we must edit this part so that he speaks as someone living in Eriador. This first part is short and straightforward, but the next part is long and dense, so this can act as a nice warm up. Last edited by ArcusCalion; 02-25-2019 at 10:04 AM. |
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Wight
Join Date: Mar 2014
Posts: 121
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This chapter looks good to me, I don't have any suggestions and didn't find any typos.
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King's Writer
Join Date: Jul 2002
Posts: 1,714
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Same here: As gandalf85 I agree to all the changes and did not find any typos. Very nice work ArcusCalion!
Respectfully Findegil |
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