* *Revised Fall of Gondolin pt.3 [revisions to' Tuor in G.' & revisions toMaeglin] **

[lindil]

As mentioned in Pt 2 this has been slit off from the original "Revised Fall of Gondolin"

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Tuor in Gondolin

FG-TG-01
{Then Tuor's heart was heavy and Voronwe wept and Tuor sat by the great fountain of the king and its splashing recalled the music of the waves, and his soul was troubled by the conches of Ulmo and he would return down the waters of Sirion to the sea.}
In the later story, the urging of Ulmo through Tuor that Turgon prepare an assault on Angband is gone, as should be Tuor's weeping.

FG-TG-02
{and she was} [Idril Celebrindal, the] daughter of the king.
Idril has already appeared in the story.

FG-TG-03
{and how there had been divided counsels in that matter, yet pity for the enthralled Noldoli had prevailed in the end to its making}
There is no later mention of such divided counsel, and the enthralled Noldor motif was later significantly downplayed.

FG-TG-04
{, and it was made of Gnome-steel overlaid with silver; but his helm was adorned with a device of metals and jewels like to two swan-wings, one on either side, and a swan's wing was wrought on his shield}
Use previously

FG-TG-05
{ - and many murmured and would fain have backed him into battle with the Orcs, seeing that the speeches of those two, Tuor and Turgon, before the palace were known to many; but this matter went not further for reverence of Turgon, and because at this time in Tuor's heart the thought of the words of Ulmo seemed to have grown dim and far off.}
Same reason as in TG-01.

FG-TG-06
and the strands of her fate were woven with his even from that day when first she gazed upon him {from a high window} as he stood a way-worn suppliant before the palace of the king.
According to TO, Idril is in the king's chamber when Tuor arrives, not at a high window.

FG-TG-07
{Thus was first wed a child of Men with a daughter of Elfinesse, nor was Tuor the last}
According to LQ, with Beren and Luthien.

FG-TG-08
{and that tale of Isfin and Eöl may not here be told}
This will have been told earlier.

FG-TG-09
{Less fair was he than most of this goodly folk, swart and of none too kindly mood, so that he won small love, and whispers there were that he had Orc's blood in his veins, but I know not how this could be true.}
I think this should be deleted, though we are without any direct contradiction of it. There is no later indication that Maeglin was 'swart', and certainly there were not rumours that he had Orc's blood!

FG-TG-10
{Now he had bid often with the king for the hand of Idril, yet Turgon finding her very loth had as often said nay, for him seemed Meglin's suit was caused as much by the desire of standing in high power beside the royal throne as by love of that most fair maid.} /*QS77 And {Maeglin's} [his] secret hatred grew ever greater, for he esired above all things to possess {her} Idril, the only heir of the King of Gondolin.*/

FG-TG-11 KO
In these days came to pass the fulfilment of the time of the desire of the Valar and the hope of [the] Eldalië

FG-TG-12
{Now thereto there are many interpretations both among Elves and Men, but belike it was a name wrought of some secret tongue among the Gondothlim and that has perished with them from the dwellings of the Earth.}
The etymology of 'Earendil' is obviously not now a secret.


Maeglin's Treachery

FG-M-01 Gondolin revealed
/*QS77 None knew that the region wherein the Hidden Kingdom lay had been at last revealed to Morgoth by the cries of Húrin, when standing in the wilderness beyond the Encircling Mountains and finding no entrance he called on Turgon in despair. Thereafter the thought of Morgoth was bent unceasing on the mountainous land between Anach and the upper waters of Sirion.*/
This is almost certainly an editorial insertion by CT based on the account in WH but may be retained as it states only what we know must be the case. We don't have the freedom to create one as good by ourselves out of fragments.

FG-M-02 Morgoth sends spies.
{Behold now many years have gone since Tuor was lost amid the foothills and deserted by those Noldoli; yet many years too have gone since to Melko's ears came first those strange tidings − faint were they and various in form − of a Man wandering amid the dales of the waters of Sirion. Now Melko was not much afraid of the race of Men in those days of his great power, and for this reason did Ulmo work through one of this kindred for the better deceiving of Melko, seeing that no Valar and scarce any of the Eldar or Noldoli might stir unmarked of his vigilance. Yet nonetheless foreboding smote that ill heart at the tidings,} [And] {and} {he} [Morgoth] got together a mighty army of spies; sons of the {Orcs} [Orks] were there with eyes of yellow and green like cats that could pierce all glooms and see through mist or fog or night; snakes that could go everywhither and search all crannies or the deepest pits or the highest peaks, listen to every whisper that ran in the grass or echoed in the hills; wolves there were and ravening dogs and great weasels full of the thirst of blood whose nostrils could take scent moons old through running water, or whose eyes find among shingle footsteps that had passed a lifetime since; owls came and falcons whose keen glance might descry by day or night the fluttering of small birds in all the woods of the world, and the movement of every mouse or vole or rat that crept or dwelt throughout the Earth. All these he summoned to his Hall of Iron, and they came in multitudes. Thence he sent them over the Earth to seek this Man who had escaped from the Land of Shadows, but yet far more curiously and intently to search out the dwelling of the {Noldoli} [Noldor] {that had escaped his thraldom} [of Turgon]; for these his heart burnt to destroy or to enslave.
The modifications are the change of "he" to "Morgoth" for readiblity and of the phrase "that had escaped his thraldom} to "of Turgon". The sons of Fëanor and their people are also free from Morgoth's thraldom. This phrase may go back to Tolkien's original version of FG where the sons of Fëanor probably did not exist.

FG-M-03 Findings of the spies
Now while Tuor dwelt in happiness and in great increase of knowledge and might in Gondolin, these creatures through the years untiring nosed among the stones and rocks, hunted the forests and the heaths, espied the airs and lofty places, tracked all paths about the dales and plains, and neither let nor stayed. From this hunt they brought a wealth of tidings to {Melko} [Morgoth] − indeed {among} many hidden things {that} they dragged to light {they discovered that Way of Escape whereby Tuor and Voronwë entered aforetime. Nor had they done so save by constraining some of the less stout of the Noldoli with dire threats of torment to join in that great ransacking; for because of the magic about that gate no folk of Melko unaided by the Gnomes could come to it. Yet now they had pried of late far into its tunnels and captured within many of the Noldoli creeping there to flee from thraldom}. They had scaled too the Encircling {Hills*} [Mountains] at certain places {and gazed upon the beauty of the city of Gondolin and the strength of Amon Gwareth from afar; but into the plain they could not win for} /*WH though because of*/ the vigilance of its guardians /*WH [and] the Eagles*/ and the difficulty of those mountains /*WH no spy of {his} Morgoth's could yet come within sight of the land behind {the Encircling Mountains}*/ [them to] /*FG {gazed} [gaze] upon the beauty of the city of Gondolin and the strength of Amon Gwared from afar*/.
This is somewhat confusing as I have moved phrases to different positions in the last sentence to retain as much as possible and they show twice in this text, once as deleted and once as being retained or being inserted. In the original FG the spies could see Gondolin from the heights but could get no farther because of the vigilence of the Elves. In WH the spies cannot get even that far because of the vigilence of the Eagles. However I have kept the watch of the Elves also. In this account both Eagles and Elves are active. CT similarly keeps mentions of the "leaguer" from Q30 in QS77.

FG-M-04
{Now it so chanced that not long after Meglin went to the hills for the getting of ore,
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and he durst never again wander amid the mines lest he again fall in with the Orcs and be bidden once more to the terrors of the halls of darkness.}
Use later

FG-M-05 Turgon's policy of isolation continues.
Now the years fare by, and egged by Idril Tuor keepeth ever at his secret delving{;}[.] /*Q30 Tidings Turgon heard of {Thorndor} [Thorondor] concerning the slaying of Dior, Thingol's heir, and thereafter he shut his ear to word of the woes without; and he vowed to march never at the side of any son of Fëanor; and his folk he forbade ever to pass the leaguer of the hills*/ but seeing that the leaguer of spies hath grown thinner Turgon dwelleth more at ease and in less fear.
The final ruin of Doriath belongs chronologically to this period and so is inserted at this point. I have noticed the awkward changes of tenses and levels of archaism in the resulting sentence. I am purposely not dealing with such stylistic problems at this time.
In published writings an account of the construction of the secret way appears only in QS77 and FG indicating the account in FG is probaby a summary of the FG account by CT and Guy Kay.

FG-M-06 Maeglin is captured.
/*Q30 On a time when Eärendil was yet young, and the days of Gondolin were full of joy and peace {(and yet Idril's heart misgave her, and foreboding crept upon her spirit like a cloud)}, Maeglin was lost. Now Maeglin loved mining and quarrying after metals above other craft; and he was master and leader of the Elves who worked in the mountains distant from the city, seeking for metals for their smithying of things both of peace and war. But often Maeglin went with few of his folk beyond the leaguer of the hills, though the king knew not that his bidding was defied; and so it came to pass, as fate willed, that Maeglin*/ /*FG straying in the mountains alone was taken /*Q30 prisoner*/ by some of the {Orcs} [Orks] prowling there, and they would do him evil and terrible hurt, knowing him to be a man of the {Gondothlim} [Gondolindrim]. This was however unknown of Tuor's watchers. {But} /*QS30 {Meglin} [Maeglin] was no weakling or craven, but the torment wherewith he was threatened cowed his soul, and*/ evil came into the heart of {Meglin} [Maeglin], and he said to his captors: "Know then that I am {Meglin} [Maeglin] son of Eöl who had to wife {Isfin} [Aredhel] sister of Turgon king of the {Gondothlim} [Gondolindrim]." But they said: "What is that to us?" And {Meglin} [Maeglin] answered: "Much is it to you; for if you slay me, be it speedy or slow, ye will lose great tidings concerning the city of Gondolin that your master would rejoice to hear." Then the {Orcs} [Orks] stayed their hands, and said they would give him life if the matters he opened to them seemed to merit that; and {Meglin} [Maeglin] told them of all the fashion of that plain and city, of its walls and their height and thickness, and the valour of its gates; of the host of men at arms who now obeyed Turgon he spake, and the countless hoard of weapons gathered for their equipment, of the engines of war and the venomous fires.*/
/*FG Then the {Orcs} [Orks] were wroth, and having heard these matters were yet for slaying him there and then as one who impudently enlarged the power of his miserable folk to the mockery of the great might and puissance of {Melko} [Morgoth]; but {Meglin} [Maeglin] catching at a straw said: "Think ye not that ye would rather pleasure your master if ye bore to his feet so noble a captive, that he might hear my tidings of himself and judge of their verity?"
Now this seemed good to the {Orcs} [Orks], and they returned from the mountains about Gondolin to the Hills of Iron and the dark halls of {Melko} [Morgoth]; thither they haled {Meglin} [Maeglin] with them, and now was he in a sore dread. But when he knelt before the black throne of {Melko} [Morgoth] in terror of the grimness of the shapes about him, of the wolves that sat beneath that chair and of the adders that twined about its legs, {Melko} [Morgoth] bade him speak. Then [he] told {he} {those tidings, and Melko hearkening spake very fair to him, that the insolence of his heart in great measure returned.}*/ /*Q30 {he purchased his life and freedom by revealing} unto Morgoth the place of Gondolin.*/
Merging of the two accounts. Idril's foreboding is removed here as this is the only occurrence in Q30 and must be taken as a short summary covering the much fuller account in FG given in "The Attack on Gondolin" in a previous post in this thread. Q30 mentions Maeglins's fear of torture only after he is taken to Angband by the Orks, but that is probably from compression, not because JRRT necessarily changed the story. Maeglin would have feared torture both when captured by the Orks and later when brought before Morgoth. Indeed in FG Morgoth, after the agreement is made, again threatens Maelgin with "the torment of the Balrogs" in return for any treachery. The words "he purchased his life and freedom by revealing" are removed here because in the latest account in WH revealing the location of Gondolin is not what preserves Maeglin's life. Morgoth already knows that information. See the next section.

FG-M-07 Morgoth's first answer.
/*WH Morgoth {must answer} [answered] laughing, saying: 'Stale news will buy nothing. I know this already, I am not so easily blinded!' So Maeglin was obliged to offer more − /*Q30 the ways whereby it might be {found and} assailed*/ and to himself undermine resistance in Gondolin.*/
Merger of two accounts: WH note 30 and Q30. The futher arrangement concering Tuor, Eärendil, and Idril is covered in the following section FG.

FG-M-08 Morgoth and Maeglin agree.
/*FG [And] {and} {Melko} [Morgoth] hearkening spake very fair to him, that the insolence of his heart in great measure returned.*/
/*Q30 Great indeed was the joy of Morgoth[.]*/ /*FG Now the end of this was that {Melko} [Morgoth] aided by the cunning of {Meglin} [Maeglin] devised a plan for the overthrow of Gondolin. For this {Meglin} [Maeglin]'s reward was to be {a great captaincy among the Orcs} /*Q30 the lordship of Gondolin, as his vassal*/ /*Q30 when that city should be taken*/ − yet {Melko} [Morgoth] purposed not in his heart to fulfil such a promise − {but} [and] {Tuor and Eärendel should Melko burn, and} [Maeglin was to] /*WH compass the death of Tuor and Eärendil if he could. If he did {he}*/ Idril /*WH would*/ be given to {Meglin} [Maeglin]'s arms − and such promises was that evil one fain to redeem. /*Q30 Lust for Idril and hatred of Tuor led Maeglin the easier to this foul treachery.*/*/
A merging of three accounts: FG, Q30 and WH note 30.

FG-M-09
/*FG Yet as meed of treachery did {Melko} [Morgoth] threaten {Meglin} [Maeglin] with the torment of the Balrogs. Now these were demons with whips of flame and claws of steel by whom he tormented those of the {Noldoli} [Noldor] who durst withstand him in anything − and the Eldar have called them {Malkarauki} [Valaroukar]. But the rede that {Meglin} [Maeglin] gave to {Melko} [Morgoth] was that not all the host of the {Orcs} [Orks] nor the Balrogs in their fierceness might by assault or siege hope ever to overthrow the walls and gates of Gondolin even if they availed to win unto the plain without. Therefore he counselled {Melko} [Morgoth] to devise out of his sorceries a succour for his warriors in their endeavour. From the greatness of his wealth of metals and his powers of fire he bid him make beasts like snakes and dragons of irresistible might that should overcreep the Encircling Hills and lap that plain and its fair city in flame and death.*/
Further discussion between Morgoth and Maeglin.

FG-M-10 Maeglin returns.
/*FG Then /*Q30 {Melko} [Morgoth] sent*/ {Meglin} [Maeglin] {was bidden fare home lest at his absence men suspect somewhat} /*Q30 back to Gondolin, lest men should suspect the betrayal, and so that {Meglin} [Maeglin] should aid the assault from within when the hour came*/; but {Melko} [Morgoth] wove about him the spell of bottomless dread, and he had thereafter neither joy nor quiet in his heart. Nonetheless [though] /*Q30 evil was in his heart,*/ he {wore} /*Q30 abode in the halls of the king with*/ a fair mask of good liking and gaiety, so that men said: "{Meglin} [Maeglin] is softened", and he was held in less disfavour; yet Idril feared him the more. Now {Meglin} [Maeglin] said: "I have laboured much and am minded to rest, and to join in the dance and the song and the merrymakings of the folk", and he went no more quarrying stone or ore in the hills: yet in sooth he sought herein to drown his fear and disquiet. A dread possessed him that {Melko} [Morgoth] was ever at hand, and this came of the spell; and he durst never again wander amid the mines lest he again fall in with the {Orcs} [Orks] and be bidden once more to the terrors of the halls of darkness.*/
Merging of two accounts.

Original editing Antoine, prior emendations by Jallanite and the council

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