the Darkening of Valinor: texts and discussion

[lindil]

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I have gone through I,IV,V, and 77 and am starting on X ,looking to list all the needed pages for our work.

It seems as if thecontents of the chapters shifted over time and we may have to devise a new consruct for DoV and the preceding chapters.
X is full of material directly and indirectly related and we will need a careful perusal to narrow down what is germain to DoV.
I am in class all day so I hope to publish an outline of the texts and maybe a proposal or 2 re: it.

Meanwhile saulotus feel free to pull your finished DoV out ! <img src=smile.gif ALT="">

If anyone already has somethought's here let's have it please

lindil

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[Saulotus]

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Re: the Darkening of Valinor: texts and discussion

<blockquote>Quote:<hr> X is full of material directly and indirectly related and we will need a careful perusal to narrow down what is germain to DoV.<hr></blockquote>
As Mithadan pointed out; AFAIK I'm to suggest MT alternatives while the main project is to proceed with the general old Mythology concept.

To my understanding, this would eliminate the need for others to need &gt;all&lt; the volumes of History or to concern themselves with the problematic text MT presents.

<blockquote>Quote:<hr> Meanwhile saulotus feel free to pull your finished DoV out<hr></blockquote>
I have it; yes. But that would superceed the project, as I can simply point out differences concerning MT and the resultant revised text of the project. I don't want to feel as Mithadan put it: &quot;Saul has already written the canon&quot;.
That would not make it much of a group effort would it?
You may consider what little I have previously sent as an idea and example of my editorial process along the lines of the project's mission objective, and how a revised text &gt;may&lt; appear at the end of the labor.


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[lindil]

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DoV

Actually Saulotus , the quote about pulling out your DoV was [foolishly dor my part it is now revealed ] in jest. I thought you had already given us your versions! I quite agree w/ holding back till the discussion phase , so that the group process thing can work itself out. I assume yours is a MT version?

I would be interested to know , as this is part of what I envision as necesarry pre-editing discussion,:
how did you handle the inclusion of the Finwe and Miriel material ? it seems to throw alll other versions into a bit of disarray. I am still going through X to get the gist of all the versions and what has been shifted , so i may be missing the obvious .

Mithadan , any early obsevations of the X version to guide my reading abit?
durelen , M. is sending you a copy?

lindil

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Re: DoV

<blockquote>Quote:<hr> I assume yours is a MT version?<hr></blockquote>
Correct.
<blockquote>Quote:<hr> how did you handle the inclusion of the Finwe and Miriel material?<hr></blockquote>
As a seperate sub-chapter; Of Finwe and Miriel.

I kept the material pretty much as is; i.e. different styles in different chapters. For &gt;me&lt;; it gave it that feeling of having been comprised from many sources (as either Bilbo and\or the the Eriol\[Tar]-Elendil connection I mentiooned awhile back would create), but that was &gt;MY&lt; personal choice.

Since you asked....



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[lindil]

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I,IV,V,77,X

Well, closer perusal has yeilded a knotty number of texts in X alone.

We are left with 1 big decision and thousands of small one's .

the big one:

In it's final conception [written in late 1950's ]JRRT, had introduced ' The Darkening Of Valinor' as an overall title for the following chapters: [differently #'ed from the 77]
5 - Of Finwe and Miriel
6 - Of Feanor and the Unchaining of Melkor
7 - Of the Silmarils and the Unrest of the Noldor
8 - the Darkening of Valinor
*-of the rape of the Silmarils
9 - The Thieves' Quarrel

I had no idea of this when I suggested DoV as the starter text.

If we tackle it all now , it will take longer [obviously] , but yeild a rich and full treatment of the core of the 1st 1/2 of the Silm. or do we stick w./ what became invisaged as a sub chapter , if you will.

It will still involve checking texts from: I,IV,V,77,X and Xhas lot's to chose from.

Here is my list of what pages seem to be involved for doing DoV in the short conception
[this was how I was compiling till I got to the new format in X.

So maybe we can look carefully at these texts, getting a feel for the issues [CRRT's textual notes are reliable in showing major divergences and the introduction and disappearence of the individual themes w/in each chapter, it's funny, because I found them pretty dull till recently<img src=smile.gif ALT=""> ]
My system ,such as it is; is to through the stories and notes starting w/ the last or first , writing comments on a seperate sheet as you go which can then be transferef to the forum. I am currently thinking that reading chrological is best for general info and becoming familiar w/ the changes. However I suspect that we will want to use the last text to start from when compiling [whenever possible].

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Starting w/ V CRRT introduces a sectional #ing system within the 'Silm' chapters , they are not keyed to the entries in the Annals although the notes discuss the convergences and cross over of ideas and langauage.
It allows easier cross referencing ofV and X and remains employed throug XI.
I propose using these for the division of our labor, once we have made the last of the general decisions , which in this case seems to be, 1 chapter or 5 chapters DoV.
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There is some overlapping of at what place in the narrative eah version starts and s tops, i.e. in a given chapter it may include a bit that in another version is placed later or earlier, for this reason some of my pages noted are slightly outside o f the D0V proper as it shifted around ,. I suggest being familiar w/ the paragraphs [if not chapters] before and after DoV [big one or small one once we decide ] to avoid missing stray details.

here are the pages for stories and the relevant notes that I came up with:

I - theTheft of Melko and the Darkening of Valinor ch.6 p. 141-161

IV - earliest Annals of Valinor: p.265-6
- the quenta : chapter 4 ,p. 89 -94

V - later annals of Valinor: p.113-115 valinorean years 2500- 2991
- quenta silmarillion : Of the Silmarils and the Darkening of Valinor ch 4, pages 227-232 #'s 46-59
&amp; 5 of the Flight of the Noldor, #'s60 -64 p232-33, + notes on p. 238-9
77 - ch.8 p. 73 -77

X - The Annals of Aman p. 93 -106 p. Yr. 1400, #87-116
- p.142 - 3 have a few introductory comments interest.
- the later Q.S. 1st phase Of the Silmarils and the Darkening of Valinor ch.6 p. 184 - 193 #'s 46-56
- general note to the final version , concerning the subchapters of the now 5 chapter Do V ***p. 256
- the later Q.S. 2nd phase Of the Silmarils and the Darkening of Valinor sub chapters Of 'of the silmarills * * * * * * * * the unrest of the noldor' and 'of the rape of the silmarills' [contains material that has been in DoV till this * * * * * * * * * * * * version] , and ' of the darkeningof valinor' p. 273- 295 w/ final notes on 298-300
None of the above versions has MTshanges I have noticed yet.

So, let's read up and decide wether we want the Big DoV or the Little and then decide upon sectioning the chapters whichever way we decide.

NB* * * * I hope this is more useful than confusing , I know I will have to do something like this when there are more than say 3 versions involved for my own sanity, so I thought it wise to share.And I hoped it would make it easier for anyone following in our footsteps or peering over our shoulders!


lindil



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[Saulotus]

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Re: I,IV,V,77,X

To add a small sense of relief; DoV requires little information from MT.
MT mainly deals with Ainulindale and already has a version presented.
The real problem that you will be confronted with is in Vol. 12 Late Writings ( Of Dwarves and Men to be a bit more specific). But since the majority of that comes into play AFTER the return to ME, it's a situation that no immediate concern is needed.

From MT there are only really a couple of items that need to be remembered:

The Song of the Sun and Moon is Narsilion.
This implies that there is a chapter of this title. ;O

The Sleep of Yavanna works with 77 and MT as both are situating ME in darkness (and the trees and plants in ME need some 'supernatural' explanation either way.

After the Trees die; Tilion &gt;returns&lt; to the Moon, not the steersman of the new moon (as this is the proposed, and self-admittedly provable resolution on the sun and moon problem). Aren has departed long before, and the Sun no longer has an Ainu.

The Dome of Varda is a cloud cover that covers Valinor, not a stone or otherwise physical construction. It has imitation stars placed in the sky to mimic the outer reaches. This is the sight that Ungoliant sees...
See MT section III note 2 for full sentence structure.
See section XI for details on exact nature of Dome.

Other than that; I don't recall too many other problems with MT in DoV. <img src=biggrin.gif ALT="">





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[lindil]

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DoV size

After thinking about it a bit , I will go on record favoring doing the short sub-chapter if you will , of DoV proper, and when [God willing] we have finished that , decide if we want to continue w/ the greater DoV and it's remaining sub-chapters.



'The dwindling Men of the West would often sit up late into the night, and awaken early before dawn- exchanging lore and wisdom such as they possessed , so that they should not fall back into the mean and low estate of those , who never knew or more sadly still, had indeed rebelled against the Light.' Lindil is often found on posting on the Silmarillion Canon Forum at the Barrowdowns discussion board. </p>

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Re: DoV size

Agreed on shorter chapter. I will be sending Durelen a copy of HoME 5 not 10. Shorter chapter still kind of begs the question of what's in and what's out (or more accurately, in another chapter). Maybe we should take a short detour and seek agreement on what the chapters (and their order) should be?

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

[lindil]

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yep

a new and simplified response. lets go w/ the final conception in X {QS phase 2].

the big version of the DoV would at my suggestion look thus:
Of Finwe and Miriel
Of Feanor and the Unchaining of Melkor
Of the Silmarils and the Unchaining of Melkor
Of the Silmarills and the Unrest of the Noldor
{{Of the Darkening of Valinor }}
{{ Of the Rape of the Silmarils}}
Of the Thieves Quarrel

Thus I suggest doing the 2 double bracketed chapters above , I include 'Of the rape of the silmarils' as it seems to have been a part of DoV in all prior conceptions and will complete the work on the chapter in the old format , whiledividing the material according to the final conception.

What say ye?



Also that will mean getting durelen X chapters { would you like me to keep an eye out for a used copy ? , I live in an area w/ an abudance and of used bookstores and tend to frequent them.


At the risk of pondering criminal activity online [is pondering a crime,criminal? ] , does anyone have scanning capabilities and then it can be emailed? I am not quite there yet [I have an Italian scanner that has a lame mac software card that I suppose I need to try again now that I have a computer that is only 5 years old instead of 7!]



'The dwindling Men of the West would often sit up late into the night, and awaken early before dawn- exchanging lore and wisdom such as they possessed , so that they should not fall back into the mean and low estate of those , who never knew or more sadly still, had indeed rebelled against the Light.' Lindil is often found on posting on the Silmarillion Canon Forum at the Barrowdowns discussion board. </p>Edited by: <A HREF=http://www.barrowdowns.com/cgi-bin/ultimatebb.cgi?ubb=get_profile&u=00000076>lindil</A> at: 1/15/01 5:52:23 pm

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Re: yep{&amp; BW remove this dangerous post in 48 hrs! }

In answer to lindil's question, I have a scanner here in my dorm room, and one at my home. I don't know how that helps us now, but maybe later on. With my new sleek computer I am sure I can email text copied on a scanner, but then again, I don't have all the texts.

I also agree that we should finalize a chapter outline. Jeez, no matter how I try, I can't seem to even come close to all of you long winded posts.

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[lindil]

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long winded

consider it a virtue.

as for you havig a scanner that's great- now all you need is a copy of Morgoth's ring and you can scan it to yourself <img src=smile.gif ALT=""> ! It prob will come in handy a some point.


lindil

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[lindil]

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unburied answer to Mithadan

Having a feeling rhat my response via editing an earlier post was missed , I extract it and placse it here.

a new and simplified response. lets go w/ the final conception in X {QS
phase 2].

the big version of the DoV would at my suggestion look thus:
Of Finwe and Miriel
Of Feanor and the Unchaining of Melkor
Of the Silmarils and the Unchaining of Melkor
Of the Silmarills and the Unrest of the Noldor
{{Of the Darkening of Valinor }}
{{ Of the Rape of the Silmarils}}
Of the Thieves Quarrel

Thus I suggest doing the 2 double bracketed chapters above , I
include 'Of the rape of the silmarils' as it seems to have been a part
of DoV in all prior conceptions and will complete the work on the
chapter in the old format , whiledividing the material according to the
final conception.

What say ye?



Also that will mean getting durelen X chapters { would you like me to
keep an eye out for a used copy ? , I live in an area w/ an abudance
and of used bookstores and tend to frequent them.

lindil

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[Saulotus]

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Re: unburied answer to Mithadan

I think this is best. It all falls under the general theme; the darkening of Valinor (and perhaps why it was to be instituted).

It also allows for easier editorial work, as the sub-chapters can be attacked seperately.

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[Mithadan]

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Re: unburied answer to Mithadan

FYI, I also lack HoME X tho I have read it many times. Keep an eye out for me at those used book stores. The best price I've seen on line is about $20.00, Shipping included. In th meantime, can I get away with using V? My recollection is that X differs from V only slightly (not including MT).

The outline looks good.

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

[lindil]

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X

Well it seemed to be slightly differnt at every turn. I think X is the most crucial book for this chapter and I was going to suggest it as the base text.

I can mail it to you if S. [or bw?] ca n't scan the relevant chapter's or you are not in a position to reacquire. I will hound the bookstores next week.
or [not my favorite choice] we could file this DoV material and look for something Beleriandic that needs XI ?

Maybe we should set up a canon fund ? I will start replying to all those goofy &quot;you can get grants right now!' spams I get.


lindil

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Re: X

<blockquote>Quote:<hr> &quot;Maybe we should set up a canon fund ? &quot;<hr></blockquote>

Great idea, only if it would work. I will end up having the necessary books, it may take a year, but I will get them. I am sure after a while so will Mithadan. I can't wait until I get V! Soon I will become something of a Tolkien guru. And all at the tender age of 19.

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[lindil]

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Ah to be young ....

Glad you have a goal to get them.
as to the fund..let's see 198 members ,100 $ in books- 50 cents from each regestered user
will do it<img src=smile.gif ALT="">

L.

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[Mithadan]

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Re: Ah to be young ....

Thanks, Lindil. Its available in my local library (I'm probably the only person who's taken it out), but if you can find it, great. I have all the other 1st age texts (my favorite period).

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

[Saulotus]

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Re: Ah to be young ....

<blockquote>Quote:<hr> I can mail it to you if S. [or bw?] ca n't scan the relevant chapter's or you are not in a position to reacquire<hr></blockquote>If you would be so kind; please specify &gt;exactly&lt; which pages you wish, and I will scan them so that they may be dispersed to other members of the project.

I will also insert the relevant notes where appropriate.

If it's a fairly small selection of pages you can expect a result soon. If it's longer.... then a longer wait.

This might be feasible for future sections; provided I (or BW) has advance notice of page numbers.

Scanning an entire book is beyond my time capabilities ATM.


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Re: Ah to be young ....

Thanks Saul. In the meantime, I'll look for X

--Mithadan--
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were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

[lindil]

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In the meanwhile...

I scrapped the outline plan as having too low of a labor to purpose ratio.
[and none yea'd it anyway<img src=wink.gif ALT=""> ] However I will try and do something in the way of important passages of I,IV and V which we may want to retain . I know I has a few details I hope to see make it , but I am not even sure Iv and V have anything to offer.


Lindil

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[Saulotus]

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Re: In the meanwhile...

I'm not sure the yea or nay has import atm; as the downs seem awfully quiet of late (few posts).

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Re: In the meanwhile...

Ok, I probably shouldn't do this but here goes. washere@butisn't.now, that is my email. Okay Saulotus?

</p>Edited by: <A HREF=http://www.barrowdowns.com/cgi-bin/ultimatebb.cgi?ubb=get_profile&u=00000045>Durelen</A> at: 1/22/01 12:45:53 am

[Saulotus]

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Re: In the meanwhile...

Done.

If that's not quite sufficient, then I can compensate.

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[lindil]

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email

*edit* elven Lore so sensitive , we can't even post it on this near private forum of ours*end edit*
please email me/ or post here when you have X and co. <img src=smile.gif ALT="">

lindil

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[Saulotus]

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Re: email

As I've already done on anything pointing to the issue at hand.

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Re: email

Does that site have everything?

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[Saulotus]

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Re: email

Yes; Encycopedia of Arda is quite comprehensive.

If you have any other concerns please address me PRIVATELY on them.

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[lindil]

up

as per maedhros' request.

I am not sure hw much revised text there is.

It maybe in the private forum.

It should all be here or in the private forum.

Your default setting may only be to see the last years posts [as mine was].

that should reveal the old DOV in the private form as well.

I have to run or I would do it now.

L

[Maédhros]

Lindil, I have made sure as you said to see if my thread view option was shown set to see all the threads, yet I have look both in the public and private forum and have not yet found it. Sorry to bother you but do you think that you could point it out to me. I may have seen it, but I can't recognize it.

[gandalf85]

These comments are based on the latest version of the text I received from Findegil. A few general notes pertaining to the whole text:

1) There is an instance where the term "the Powers" is used. Are we using "Powers" interchangeably with "Valar"? I personally think we should use "Valar" consistently but I could probably be convinced otherwise.

2) Are we using the spelling "Maedros" and not "Maedhros"?

Now more specific comments:

1) I don't think the four paragraphs which start "Now came the {Teleri}[Vanyar] led by the white-robed people ..." up to "Only the Teleri beyond the mountains still sang upon the shores of the Sea; for they reeked little of seasons or times, and gave no thought to the cares of the King of Arda, or to the shadow that had fallen upon Valinor; for it had not touched them, as yet." flows very well. It first says that the Vanyar and Noldor come, then later it says that on the third day the Vanyar and Noldor come. I think it flows better if we follow the basic chronology: The Vanyar and Noldor come and are greeted by Varda. They have feasts and songs. On the third day the Elves go to Taniquetil and Manwe teaches them of the Music. On the last day the Valar come to Tuna. Here is my proposed revision:

Now came the {Teleri}[Vanyar] led by the white-robed people of DoV-DV-04 {the Inwir}[Ingwë], and the throbbing of their congregated harps beat the air most sweetly; and after them went the {Noldoli}[Noldor] DoV-DV-05 mingling once more with their own dear folk by Manwë's clemency, that his festival might be duly kept, but the music that their viols and instruments awoke was now more sweetly sad than ever before.{ And last came the people of the shores, and their piping blent with voices brought the sense of tides and murmurous waves and the wailing cry of the coast-loving birds thus inland deep upon the plain.}
Then was all that host marshalled before the gate of {Valmar}[Valimar], and at the word and sign from {Inwe}[Ingwë] as one voice they burst in unison into the Song of Light. This had DoV-DV-06 {Lirillo}[Salmar] written and taught them, and it told of the longing of the Elves for light, of their dread journey through the dark world led by the desire of the Two Trees, and sang of their utmost joy beholding the faces of the {Gods}[Valar] and their renewed desire once more to enter {Valmar}[Valimar] and tread the Valar's blessed courts. Then did the gates of {Valmar}[Valimar] open and {Nornore}[Eönwë] bid them enter, and all that bright company passed through.
There Varda met them, standing amid the companies of the DoV-DV-07 {Manir and the Suruli}[Maiar], and all the {Gods}[Valar] made them welcome, and feasts there were in all the great halls thereafter.
§58b DoV-DV-10 {There}{[On the third day there] came the Vanyar, and there came the Noldor of Túna, and the Maiar were gathered together, and}.
Now their custom was on the third day to robe themselves all in white and blue and ascend to the heights of Taniquetil, <and> the Valar were arrayed in their beauty and majesty; and they sang before Manwë and Varda in the halls of Taniquetil, or played and danced upon the green slopes of the Mountain that looked west to the Trees. {and} {In that day the streets of {Valmar}[Valimar] were empty, } <And> there would Manwë speak to them as he thought fit of the Music of the Ainur and the glory of Ilúvatar, and of things to be and that had been.> DoV-DV-08 <BoLT 1;VI And on that day would {Kor}[Tirion] and {Valmar}[Valimar] be silent and still, <and the stairs of Túna were silent, and all the land lay sleeping in peace. Only the Teleri beyond the mountains still sang upon the shores of the Sea; for they reeked little of seasons or times, and gave no thought to the cares of the King of Arda, or to the shadow that had fallen upon Valinor; for it had not touched them, as yet.>
{but} But the roof of the world and the slope of Taniquetil shine with the gleaming raiment of the {Gods}[Valar] and Elves, and all the mountains echo with their speech - but afterward on the last day of merriment the {Gods}[Valar] would come to {Kor}[Tirion] and sit upon the slopes of its bright hill, gazing in love upon that slender town, and thereafter blessing it in the name of Ilúvatar would depart ere Silpion came to bloom; and so would end the days of DoV-DV-09 {Double Mirth}[mirth].

2) I think the section on Galadriel starting "DoV-UN-00.2 <UT Galadriel and her brother Finrod were the children of..." feels out of place. The previous section ends with Melkor spreading lies, then there's a long digression on Galadriel, then the next section starts "It is told also that when Melkor saw that these lies were smouldering he began to speak...". "These lies" sounds awkward after the section on Galadriel. Since Galadriel's section discusses the Exile and ends with her settling in Alqualonde, it might work better if we move it to after Feanor's rebellion and decision to sail east but before the kinslatying.

[Findegil]

1) the Powers: I think ‘the Powers’ is still a valid equivalent to ‘the Valar’. I am not in favour of eliminating all such synonyms.

2) Maedros: Yes that is the name we decided to use, because it was the last Version Tolkien used.

About the more specific points:
1) I don’t agree to this. The flow of your editing is nice, put what you left out is the information what was the custom at the last day of the festival. It is only the planes that are talked about in the paragraph beginning with “Now their custom was …”. And §58b is then the real happening.

2) DoV-UN-00.2: The placement of that part and if we take it fully or shorten it is still open for discussion. I thin I added that part long after the discussion of this part of the chapter. When I find the time I will go through this again and post a list of changes I made and the reason for them.

Respectfully
Findegil