I just made up this song...it's not very good but I'd like your opinion :) - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

Rindoien, elf of Lothlorien · 05-10-2003, 01:47 PM

The Elves were the immortal,
The graceful,
The good.
The Elves were the wisest,
The fairest,
The first.

The Dwarves were the miners,
The craftsmen,
The short.
The Dwarves were the delving,
The bearded,
The rash.

The men were the foolish,
The Kings,
The strong.
The men were the swordsmen,
The greedy,
The rulers.

The hobbits were the mischievous,
The jolly,
The fun.
The hobbits were the ale lovers,
The friendly,
The Halflings.

Catherine · 05-10-2003, 01:53 PM

Very nice *CLAP CLAP CLAP* [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Yavanna228 · 05-10-2003, 02:08 PM

Sounds good to me. Almost puts me in mind of Treebeard's list. Hurrah for poets and songs! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
Peace

ElenCala Isil · 05-10-2003, 02:51 PM

yes, splendid.. very good! *round of applause*

Rose Cotton · 05-10-2003, 02:58 PM

I like it, but I must say that it makes humans sound like bad people.

"Yes there is fraility, there is weakness:But there good and honor to be found in men." I know that isn't the exact quote but it's true.

Meela · 05-10-2003, 03:29 PM

Thats beautiful! I love it!

Meela · 05-10-2003, 03:30 PM

Um... is it copyrighted? I'd love to have the verse on the men in my signature...

elven maiden Earwen · 05-10-2003, 07:11 PM

That was great. Treebeard does come to mind [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]

Luthien_ Tinuviel · 05-10-2003, 07:15 PM

Very good. Since you said it was a song, does it have a tune? [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Feanor of the Peredhil · 05-11-2003, 03:43 PM

I like it. It does bring Treebeard's lists to mind. Since you did ask for opinions, I'll give a little creative criticism from one writer to another: it's good, it's creative, it's catchy, but the rhythm is a bit shaky in places. Also it seems to me that it's missing something. An ending that ties all the races together perhaps. But it's your work, not mine, and that's simply my opinion, so do what you will. Once again, nice work. I know how much guts it takes to post poetry, lyrics, or even stories for the world to see. Cheers.

Fea

Rindoien, elf of Lothlorien · 05-16-2003, 09:36 AM

Quote:

Um... is it copyrighted? I'd love to have the verse on the men in my signature...

Yeah, if you want. You could quote me though..and by the way, it's not really a song, more of a poem [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Meela · 05-16-2003, 11:20 AM

Thanks! I'll save it up for my next signature change [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

polices · 05-17-2003, 10:14 PM

I like this poem but I am just a tad bit confusend. [img]smilies/confused.gif[/img]

the guy who be short · 05-18-2003, 04:28 PM

very good, but men arent really that strong, as compared to say, elves. both physically and mentally. and it'd be better if you presented an even view of them

05-10-2003, 01:47 PM	#1
Rindoien, elf of Lothlorien Haunting Spirit Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Wales...hrumph, wish it was Lorien.. Posts: 89	I just made up this song...it's not very good but I'd like your opinion :) The Elves were the immortal, The graceful, The good. The Elves were the wisest, The fairest, The first. The Dwarves were the miners, The craftsmen, The short. The Dwarves were the delving, The bearded, The rash. The men were the foolish, The Kings, The strong. The men were the swordsmen, The greedy, The rulers. The hobbits were the mischievous, The jolly, The fun. The hobbits were the ale lovers, The friendly, The Halflings. __________________ "And he sang to them, now in the Elven tongue, now in the speech of the West, until their hearts, wounded with sweet words, overflowed, and their joy was like swords, and they passed in thought out to regions where pain and delight flow together and tears are the very wine of blessedness."

05-10-2003, 01:53 PM	#2
Catherine Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Lothlorien Posts: 297	Very nice CLAP CLAP CLAP [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] __________________ ~.:Catherine:.~ "I have never been out of my own land before. And if I had known what the world outside was like. I don't think I should have had the heart to leave it." ~Merry to Haldir in Lothlórien~

05-10-2003, 02:08 PM	#3
Yavanna228 Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: May 2003 Location: on the wings of the morning Posts: 394	Sounds good to me. Almost puts me in mind of Treebeard's list. Hurrah for poets and songs! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] Peace __________________ 'Dulaman na Binne Bui, Dulaman Gaelach/ Dulaman na farraige, 's e b'fhearr a bhi in Eirinn!'

05-10-2003, 02:51 PM	#4
ElenCala Isil Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Somewhere Else Posts: 439	yes, splendid.. very good! round of applause __________________ Prevent Merry-abuse today! Join the S.A.M. (That's the Save-A-Merry foundation) Rivendell brought to you by the long lost sister of the guy who be short.

05-10-2003, 02:58 PM	#5
Rose Cotton Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: A place worse then Mordor........School! Posts: 1,075	I like it, but I must say that it makes humans sound like bad people. "Yes there is fraility, there is weakness:But there good and honor to be found in men." I know that isn't the exact quote but it's true. __________________ "There's nothing you can do, Harry... nothing... he's gone."-Remus Lupin "The closer we are to danger, the further we are from harm."-Pippin (now how can you argue with that logic?)

05-10-2003, 03:29 PM	#6
Meela Denethor's True Love Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Mirkwood. With Thranduil... swoon Posts: 2,049	Thats beautiful! I love it! __________________ 'The Hobbit' 1st impressions: 1. Thorin is hot... Oh god, I fancy a dwarf. 2. Thranduil is hotter. 3. Is that... Figwit! 4. Does Elijah Wood never age? 2nd: It's all about Fili & Kili, really. 3rd: BARD! OMG, Bard.

05-10-2003, 03:30 PM	#7
Meela Denethor's True Love Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Mirkwood. With Thranduil... swoon Posts: 2,049	Um... is it copyrighted? I'd love to have the verse on the men in my signature... __________________ 'The Hobbit' 1st impressions: 1. Thorin is hot... Oh god, I fancy a dwarf. 2. Thranduil is hotter. 3. Is that... Figwit! 4. Does Elijah Wood never age? 2nd: It's all about Fili & Kili, really. 3rd: BARD! OMG, Bard.

05-10-2003, 07:11 PM	#8
elven maiden Earwen Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: A world that never was and never will be Posts: 1,300	That was great. Treebeard does come to mind [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] __________________ We pillage and plunder, we rifle and loot, Drink up me hearties, Yo Ho. the looniest site in the world!!!

05-10-2003, 07:15 PM	#9
Luthien_ Tinuviel Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: May 2002 Location: A very lovely tree-hut in the Chunnel. Posts: 804	Very good. Since you said it was a song, does it have a tune? [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img] __________________ I am a nineteen-year-old nomad photographer who owns a lemonade stand. You know what? I love Mip.

05-11-2003, 03:43 PM	#10
Feanor of the Peredhil La Belle Dame sans Merci Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: perpetual uncertainty Posts: 5,517	I like it. It does bring Treebeard's lists to mind. Since you did ask for opinions, I'll give a little creative criticism from one writer to another: it's good, it's creative, it's catchy, but the rhythm is a bit shaky in places. Also it seems to me that it's missing something. An ending that ties all the races together perhaps. But it's your work, not mine, and that's simply my opinion, so do what you will. Once again, nice work. I know how much guts it takes to post poetry, lyrics, or even stories for the world to see. Cheers. Fea __________________ peace

05-16-2003, 11:20 AM	#12
Meela Denethor's True Love Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Mirkwood. With Thranduil... swoon Posts: 2,049	Thanks! I'll save it up for my next signature change [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ 'The Hobbit' 1st impressions: 1. Thorin is hot... Oh god, I fancy a dwarf. 2. Thranduil is hotter. 3. Is that... Figwit! 4. Does Elijah Wood never age? 2nd: It's all about Fili & Kili, really. 3rd: BARD! OMG, Bard.

05-17-2003, 10:14 PM	#13
polices Animated Skeleton Join Date: May 2003 Location: a little place called "Stuck in a pot" Posts: 48	I like this poem but I am just a tad bit confusend. [img]smilies/confused.gif[/img] __________________ "The time of the elfs has ended."Elrond "It is also the end of the men..."ME! "It is the time of the... SUPER-ROBOTIC-FLYING-GENETICALLY-MODIFIED-SUPER-DARVES!"

05-18-2003, 04:28 PM	#14
the guy who be short Shadowed Prince Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Thulcandra Posts: 2,343	very good, but men arent really that strong, as compared to say, elves. both physically and mentally. and it'd be better if you presented an even view of them

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